What's mine is yours, and what's yours is ours

Can you figure out what this is about? thats my challenge to you.

forehead sweating,

tears streaming.

agony forms within me.

I can't breathe I can't speak

all I can do is scream

 

i grab your hand and you yelp in pain

you don't even know what that means..

all the things you've put me through

it's been such a long journey

but now its time to move on

and start a new one.

 

I wanna run I wanna hide.

but that is not an option

it's killing me deep inside

as the door slowly widens

and here she comes

straight through the opening,

 

i gasp and i cry

my baby girl has just entered the world

and all is forgiven

all the pain was worth all the joy in this world.

what's mine is yours and whats yours is ours.

 

 

 

Author's Note

a poem about one of the most beautiful things you can experience,

Reviews

[K.C. Zbryk]

This was a very unique view of child birth, and very well done. It misleads the reader with the first few stanzas but in the end you make it very clear what the piece was about. Birth. This was still a very unique and well penned and i like the mystery that you wove through the piece.

[MandaBear]

Very unique way of viewing child birth. Very interesting way to tell how the baby is when it is coming out. great job :)

[Extant]

Child birth . . . children, unfortunately, do not have a high opinion of me and vice versa . . .
Well, this is funny, as I remember my own mother talking about how she hated my father during labour, and then joyful, pride. Very . . . layered.

[BLBrown]

Giving birth to your baby is what I think this is about. It's amazing when you hold your baby for the first time, how all the pain and fear melt away. It is the most beautiful moment in a mother's life. I don't think it gets any better! Good poem!

I wrote a poem about being a new mother called "I Go Back," that you might enjoy.

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/bbrown/964495/

[mariah]

i love it!!!! it flows amazingly, and its so sweet. i love your writing :)
-mariah

[Jock Engelman]

i have always liked how you can position yourself in another's perpective.. one thing i am still learning...

btw sorry it has taken me so long to read this, i have been AFK because i have been working on my Poetry Website:
Angel Poetry

(rating = 79/100)

[Empirik]

Wow, I loved the ending as it was a beautiful mystery until the last stanza. Great! :)

[Geraldine]

Wow. this is really really cool. ^^ I was lost at first but in the end I totally got it. :D Labor and delivery. Childbirth. Ayayay! That is really an exceptional experience for a woman. :D Great write.

[L. Edward Neale]

Great twist. Now thats something you dont read everyday. A poem about childbirth. More should be written about childbirth: the miracle that it is. But perhaps it's hard to consider the beauty when it involves so much pain initially. But I know that feeling of looking into my newborn daughters eyes, just makes everything else in the whole world seem insignificant.

[MOON]

Beautiful flow and imagery.

[Clever Forever]

Amazing imagery. I really liked your take on it, too. Interesting.