What's mine is yours, and what's yours is ours

Can you figure out what this is about? thats my challenge to you.

forehead sweating,

tears streaming.

agony forms within me.

I can't breathe I can't speak

all I can do is scream

 

i grab your hand and you yelp in pain

you don't even know what that means..

all the things you've put me through

it's been such a long journey

but now its time to move on

and start a new one.

 

I wanna run I wanna hide.

but that is not an option

it's killing me deep inside

as the door slowly widens

and here she comes

straight through the opening,

 

i gasp and i cry

my baby girl has just entered the world

and all is forgiven

all the pain was worth all the joy in this world.

what's mine is yours and whats yours is ours.

 

 

 

Author's Note

a poem about one of the most beautiful things you can experience,

Reviews

[K.C. Zbryk]

This was a very unique view of child birth, and very well done. It misleads the reader with the first few stanzas but in the end you make it very clear what the piece was about. Birth. This was still a very unique and well penned and i like the mystery that you wove through the piece.

[isasi]

well written. well hidden :)

[TaylorH'sPoems]

I had a feeling it was about child birth before you gave it away :) very good poem :)

[victoria]

enjoyed despite uncertainty at beginning.

[Sarah]

tis realy good.

[Vivere ad mihi, mi Deus]

This is amazing!! i agree totally misleading at the beginning, very well done!!

[zero binty]

Whilst childbirth is a wonderful experience for most, there are those of us who have to deal with the other side. My son was born into this world through a troubled labor complicated by a doctor who "Didn't have the time". After he broke her water, he left to tend to another labor procedure. In his rush to break the water, my sons' umbilical cord got wrapped around his neck. Each push instructed by the replacement doctor resulted in my son being strangled. An emergency C-section was warranted, and though they were screams of terror, they were the most melodic sounds I have ever heard in my life. I am, however, glad that yours was a more beautiful endeavor. Congratulations to you and yours.

[Sunflower 20]

very nice. i liked the fast, suscpensful pace of this peace, and then the very rewarding ending wraps it up nicely. great job! :)

[Cathy Wattam]

I really like this poem. A little mystery and then the reveal! So true, giving birth is the most painful yet joyous experience with an outcome like no other.

You've missed an apostrophe in the last line - should read - "what's yours is ours".

Great poem. Thank you.

[Barbara Walker]

This is a great poem! The imagery is very good. I didn't know exactly what it was about until the third stanza, 5th and 6th lines. This is an accurate description, the pain and agony, but as soon as that baby appears, all is forgotten! Great write!

[Destiny Crawford]

Very nice :) I love the mystery in the first two stanzas. This an awesomely unique poem! I really liked that you chose this as your topic for this poem. Its not a subject that gets a lot of attention in poetry. But, you took that subject and made into a beautiful poem for all excited readers to enjoy! Really great poem!!

~Destiny