The Break Up song

I hate that I made you cry.

I hate that you want to die.

What is there for me to do?

When I’ve lost all my love for you!

Was I meant to keep pretending?

Have you a fake happy ending...

You should know that, that’s not me.

I just couldn’t be what you wanted me.

 

I can’t take it anymore,

So I’ll just sit here on the floor

Thinking back to when we met,

I just wanted all of that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

Baby, that’s what you called me,

Maybe that’s what you wanted

But it’s too late.

It’s too late.

I hope one day,

You’ll forget the pain

And learn how to love again,

Learn it all again.

 

I can’t do this anymore,

Don’t come knocking at my door.

You thought I was perfect,

And I just couldn’t take that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

I can’t be her anymore.

Not the one that you adore

I can’t take it anymore,

I put a lock on my door,

I can’t take it,

You can’t fake it.

I’m not her,

I’m not her.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

We were wrong..

Author's Note

My first attempt at writing a song...

Reviews

[Heromen Selena]

Very sad feeling. Eventually someone's perception can be mixed because they are blinded by the love for that person. I have no idea if this relates to What you're feeling inside but love is a veil that obscures visions. With that said, love also can make things clear. Even the most terrible people find love, and we are not all perfect. Everyone has their own perception of perfect. Very lovely poem :)

[luv2dream]

OMG, so great! I actually sang to this, I know I'm weird! Who's not though?

[SuicidePact.]

HAHAHA thats soo cool!

[luv2dream]

Not really . . .

[SuicidePact.]

Oh sorry....

:(

[luv2dream]

i was jking! i was just saying! lol

[SuicidePact.]

Lol :D

[luv2dream]

^---^

[Clever Forever]

I've never been able to write a song, so i commend you. Good job!

[SuicidePact.]

Thank you. I thought I would give it a try

[Mashairi]

You're very good at this :3 Well done :D

[Admiral Kirk]

It's a very nice song! I like it a lot, and I can definitely relate; except that I would be the one receiving this song, not writing it. I wrote a song called "I Won't Forget You" that might actually go hand in hand with this piece. Very good work. I would have done it a bit differently if I had written it, but I didn't, so excellent work. A true masterpiece.

[SuicidePact.]

thank you

[SuicidePact.]

I will look at it

[Admiral Kirk]

Thank you!

[Rhea752]

this is pretty good. do you have a melody for it yet? great write!!!

[Rhea752]

P.S. ye must answer my question, for i really want to know!!

[olla]

pretty good.. have you tried it with a tune yet..?

[SuicidePact.]

No I haven't!

[olla]

it would be interesting to see how it flows with music..

[Celestial Witch Child]

"I can't be her anymore".
Love it. Great attempt- songs are difficult.

[SuicidePact.]

Yes they are!

[Celestial Witch Child]

You did well, though! Keep it up!

[Xerclipse]

Oh boy.... complaining about wanting what was before instead of now. What type of song would you want this to be? Rock, techno, classical, etc?
either way this is a great break up song.

[SuicidePact.]

i was thinking of a Kelly Clarkson type emotional rock kind of jam.