The Break Up song

I hate that I made you cry.

I hate that you want to die.

What is there for me to do?

When I’ve lost all my love for you!

Was I meant to keep pretending?

Have you a fake happy ending...

You should know that, that’s not me.

I just couldn’t be what you wanted me.

 

I can’t take it anymore,

So I’ll just sit here on the floor

Thinking back to when we met,

I just wanted all of that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

Baby, that’s what you called me,

Maybe that’s what you wanted

But it’s too late.

It’s too late.

I hope one day,

You’ll forget the pain

And learn how to love again,

Learn it all again.

 

I can’t do this anymore,

Don’t come knocking at my door.

You thought I was perfect,

And I just couldn’t take that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

I can’t be her anymore.

Not the one that you adore

I can’t take it anymore,

I put a lock on my door,

I can’t take it,

You can’t fake it.

I’m not her,

I’m not her.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

We were wrong..

Author's Note

My first attempt at writing a song...

Reviews

[Heromen Selena]

Very sad feeling. Eventually someone's perception can be mixed because they are blinded by the love for that person. I have no idea if this relates to What you're feeling inside but love is a veil that obscures visions. With that said, love also can make things clear. Even the most terrible people find love, and we are not all perfect. Everyone has their own perception of perfect. Very lovely poem :)

[MoriartyMesa]

Music wise, I am not expert, not sure what the music would be with this, liked it.

[Tamia123]

I liked the way it flowed :) It had that nice movement that all good songs should have. The fact that your a poet (and naturally good with words) should make this even easier :) very good for a first attempt!

[Pax]

a very nice try. its really good, the rhyming fits well.

[Chrissy]

That great I loved it.

[The Wave]

Nice try. Very lyrical!

[Alicia Schroeder]

Great start.. Nice flow of words :)

[emilythestrange]

This is a great song! But I cannot imagine it to a tune right now, because I'm listening to Nicki Manaj's song Turn Me On. Still very good xxxxxxx

[Richy Moon]

It is well written :)
As far as the song writing goes, it's nice and flowing and wouldn't be too hard to put into song.
I like it, Keep on writing Jenna!

[Shy Girl]

I liked it. Sad but sooo true often times...way to often :)

[SeventhSin]

Great song! :) I like it