The Break Up song

I hate that I made you cry.

I hate that you want to die.

What is there for me to do?

When I’ve lost all my love for you!

Was I meant to keep pretending?

Have you a fake happy ending...

You should know that, that’s not me.

I just couldn’t be what you wanted me.

 

I can’t take it anymore,

So I’ll just sit here on the floor

Thinking back to when we met,

I just wanted all of that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

Baby, that’s what you called me,

Maybe that’s what you wanted

But it’s too late.

It’s too late.

I hope one day,

You’ll forget the pain

And learn how to love again,

Learn it all again.

 

I can’t do this anymore,

Don’t come knocking at my door.

You thought I was perfect,

And I just couldn’t take that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

I can’t be her anymore.

Not the one that you adore

I can’t take it anymore,

I put a lock on my door,

I can’t take it,

You can’t fake it.

I’m not her,

I’m not her.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

We were wrong..

Author's Note

My first attempt at writing a song...

Reviews

[Heromen Selena]

Very sad feeling. Eventually someone's perception can be mixed because they are blinded by the love for that person. I have no idea if this relates to What you're feeling inside but love is a veil that obscures visions. With that said, love also can make things clear. Even the most terrible people find love, and we are not all perfect. Everyone has their own perception of perfect. Very lovely poem :)

[lei]

i like how you draw the courage of accepting that you've fallen out of love....

[Zackery Alan Daley]

Aren't all first songs sad songs? All good ones at least. Great job, next time just say it out loud to help with the rythm to make it perfect :)

Zacky D.

[caroline]

It is a very good song. I love the loss in it but the acceptance of it.

[Racy Daniel]

It is really our inner feelings like sadness. Your sentiment is good. I like this poem entitlement and it's ending.

Good writing.

[Bats In The Belfry]

This is a fantastic write,very relatable, you said it all...Great Job!!!

[Laura Storm]

It's really good. Catchy. Sad yet..hmmm well any ways job well done. :)

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

Your first attempt is best. Very strong and constructive. Best wishes.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed a very storng piece, that read well, a great use of wording and smart ending.

[Raven Starhawk]

This is what I'd sing...well I can't sing, but I mean it would be a song I would sing although I never broke anyone's heart before. Usually I have had my heart broken. And it is a situation that no one likes to be in. You captured it so well.

[stars are far]

that was so bitter .. but amazing..
i loved tge ferling you are showing here :)
eventhough they are hurt but wonderful way..
well done :)