The Break Up song

I hate that I made you cry.

I hate that you want to die.

What is there for me to do?

When I’ve lost all my love for you!

Was I meant to keep pretending?

Have you a fake happy ending...

You should know that, that’s not me.

I just couldn’t be what you wanted me.

 

I can’t take it anymore,

So I’ll just sit here on the floor

Thinking back to when we met,

I just wanted all of that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

Baby, that’s what you called me,

Maybe that’s what you wanted

But it’s too late.

It’s too late.

I hope one day,

You’ll forget the pain

And learn how to love again,

Learn it all again.

 

I can’t do this anymore,

Don’t come knocking at my door.

You thought I was perfect,

And I just couldn’t take that.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

I can’t be her anymore.

Not the one that you adore

I can’t take it anymore,

I put a lock on my door,

I can’t take it,

You can’t fake it.

I’m not her,

I’m not her.

 

We were once in love,

A love, love that was so strong…

Or so we thought,

Or so we thought.

But we were wrong.

 

We were wrong..

Author's Note

My first attempt at writing a song...

Reviews

[Heromen Selena]

Very sad feeling. Eventually someone's perception can be mixed because they are blinded by the love for that person. I have no idea if this relates to What you're feeling inside but love is a veil that obscures visions. With that said, love also can make things clear. Even the most terrible people find love, and we are not all perfect. Everyone has their own perception of perfect. Very lovely poem :)

[Siren]

I like this... Especially the lines "Or so we thought. But we were wrong." I really like the way that you keep saying over and over: that's not me, I can't be her, I can't pretend. It takes strength to really be yourself. I pity the other person who can't accept you as you are--perfectly imperfect. It's a wonderful write, a declaration of your own independence. Wonderful job, dear!

[Victoria Elizabeth]

MIND.BLOWN.SUCCESSFULLY

[CHRIS ANDES]

..nice write
=]

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Very good first attempt......and I would say you succeeded.

[Miss Alicia]

wonderful writing

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Awwh, Jenna this is depressing but yet very wonderful! This is a great song indeed. I love it! I like how you capture your feelings and release them into such a brilliant song. Great write. :)

Ashley Rivers-- Keep writing! :D

[Sarah]

Very sad but its amazing.

[WILDERNESS]

v nice...

[Morrigan Nicole]

Very beautiful, despite the content. It spoke the truth, and that is what made it so great.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good flow of words. I like the emotion and description of learning the love wasn't right. I enjoyed the complete poem and the very food ending. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote