A blaze.

Dancing  tongues,

Licking lips,

T’was

The most perfect kiss.

Holding hands,

Songs

 by our favourite band.

Hearts pacing,

Hormones racing,

People screaming

Smiles were gleaming.

I held you close

The air spelt of smoke.

The fire blazed,

And the crowd were crazed

I kissed you one last time

Before we both started to run

I thought I lost you,

Didn’t know what to do

You could see me

But I couldn’t see you

My lungs filled with air

My life I had to bear

It gave me a scare.

I closed my eyes one last time

As God took me away

And that my dear

 was my very last day

Author's Note

Haven't written a poem in a while, it's probably not that great just wanted to see if I could still do it!

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

That's a tough way to say your "goodbye"!! This is a copy/paste..... What does this mean: The air spelt of smoke

I like the poem. Keep writing, O.K.? I keep stopping by 'cause you have so much to read!! : ) xoxo -Mark

[Cosmic kid]

Very emotional and beautiful, it has a beautiful flow. Describes teenage years good job :)

[Brianna Van Zandt]

Loved it. :)

[MOON]

Well expressed lovely write.

[CHRIS ANDES]

you did it real nice
=]

[Krista Weiss]

Really love this one! :)

[MoriartyMesa]

If this was a lover's letter, it could not be more perfect. If was a Dear Jon, it could not be more deep, and knowing there was one person in mind and not many in its muse. Makes it all the more charming.

[Tamia123]

I like the way you portrayed the emotions in this!!! Great poem!! :)

[Barbara Walker]

Parts of this are good and some parts are a bit contrived. "The air smelled of smoke"
"And the crowd was crazed". Only grammar mistakes I saw. The poem works well, until, "My life I had to bear".

[Legolas]

This is such a heartbreaking poem. Two lovers torn apart by a fire. One thing I would add is a comma after "and that". Great job!