The Ghost of Me

I am the stalker in the night

The killer

The savior

The one who fights

 

I am not a hero

I am the villain

I bring justice

As I do senseless killing

 

I am the one who feasts on souls

The ghost of myself

The one everyone knows

 

I was once sweet

Hatred fueled the fires

I now live

Fulfilling my desires

 

The Ghost of myself

The one you hate

The one you loathe

I am the one

Who will rule the world

 

Confess your sins

As you cry and beg

I won’t have mercy

Nor will I forgive

 

The ghost of myself

I have no love to give

A cold heartless being

That is who I am

A killer

A slayer

The savior

I will bring about your end

 

 

Author's Note

It isn't supposed to make sense nor is it supposed to inspire anything in the reader. It is just random words put together to create something that needed to be spewed out at 3:30 in the morning. Don't like it, good for you.

Reviews

[Jasmin]

wow... this was very good. It was chilling and intense and i enjoyed reading it over and over again. It made the hair on the back of my neck stand up gave me soft chills.... it gave me feelings that i dont usually get when reading a poem... does that make sense? well to sum it up it was absolutly brilliant

*I once was sweet
Hatred fueled the fires
I now live
fullfilling my desires*

[Heavyhearted]

i like it... i like you. because like this piece, you don't need my approval, or anyone else's for that matter. you just are. the makings of a great artist...

[Michael X]

striking, it actually does inspire the reader, in a chilling way, as if conjure an immense sense of terror, or stalking dread, the kind that lurks like a shadow in the night. this is spooky, dark, mysterious, and dreadful everything that sums up evil... brilliant job

[Sean M. Addams]

i liked this alot ... the concept of this piece was very cool and creative...very nice detail in this ... overall a very impressive write... fav lines...The ghost of myself
I have no love to give
A cold heartless being
That is who I am
A killer
A slayer
The savior
I will bring about your end

[Georgia Gypsy]

Those lovely/dark thoughts that assult us at 3:30 in the morning....they make perfect sense, they create wonderful chaos in our minds...i think its a great pouring out of emotion and that you did a great job with expressing what so many never seem to be able to put into words.

kudos to you on this....really like it!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Holy WOW... now that was down right raw... some are driven so far over the edge with injustice it drives them to any means possible to do what they believe right even if it is wrong causing the real them to die inside... I love this piece.

[TamiViolet]

I like the red text as I believe you were stressing the heightened degree of passion in the work although I am a bit confused. How can one do 'justice' and at the same time, the killing be 'senseless?'

Wouldn't it be horrible if our 'savior' was a killer...a slayer......as savior without mercy... But then the narrator is speaking of herself, yes? The narrator causes her own death of spirit, so to speak.

This one is very thought-provoking, Jess. It is a chilling piece, yet at the same time, one feels the passion of hatred. I feel as though its of one's sellf. Photo is perfectly placed.

I may be way off base on this one though I enjoyed it very much. Has me thinking because of its symbolic nature. I read it on several levels.

Is that you in the photo with make-up applied? I know how artistic you are...

[Matthew Parker]

This piece is a curious one. I definitely got the whole vibe, what I will [jokingly] refer to as the "Slayer lyrics" vibe. And I think you were on to something that you could definitely work with in the juxtapositions between killer/savior and justice/senseless violence.

But the problem is, though, I didn't really feel it. The flow at points was rather jarring and clunky. It was difficult to understand the greater meaning behind the words. There was no development of the reader's understanding of it all, it just felt like a lot of description of a state of mind. That isn't a bad thing, necessarily, but I was left asking why this all was so.

The giant red text didn't really help things, either. Have mercy on your readers' eyes, please.

But to summarize, I'm not going to tell you it wasn't good. It just needs some polish and revision to be what you'd like it to be.