Venus

Venus let her guard down

The tigers were on the prowl

Venus threw her sword down

Shrugged out of her shroud

 

Seducing the senses

Teasing the crowd

Laying down to expose her skin to the blue sky

 

Venus was asleep

On a cliff of rock

The tigers hovering over her

The knights watching in shock

 

She bared her throat to the ravenous cats

Exposing her soul

Her being

Venus was a martyr

Imagine that

 

The knight came in a elephant balloon

Venus lay bloody and torn

Her body exposed

Her soul an open wound

 

It was too late for the knight

He wept for the loss

Venus sacrificed herself

Her life was the cost

 

The people watched as the tigers devoured her soul

They disappeared in red flames

Leaving the onlookers in despair

Venus gave herself to them

 

She sacrificed herself for the greater good.

The knights wept

The blue sky wept

Venus sacrificed herself for the greater good

The greater good of love

 

 

Reviews

[Vertigo]

hmm interesting very well written

[Tracie Skarbo]

Nice ode to Venus....I like the pic too....Dahl?

[Helen Crutchett]

Excellent piece! I must catch up on more of your writes....this
was outstanding! ~ Helena

[melissa]

very unique! this is a wonder piece :)

[Michael X]

wow, i am swept away by this. flows with an enlightening air of romance and rapture, as in capturing the beauty of the style and messege, the meaning speaks classically. the lesson of the martyr; the sad goddess of grace. loved it.

[Alicante lullaby]

different..........really,unique...........it had a fictious element glued to it....I could see the tigers leap and tear VENUS to pieces....

[Poeticpiers]

Das ist sehr gutteTraurig

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I love this one! I feel like I can relate = ). I love reading your writings.

[Orlando Murcia]

It was like undying love

Great job

[Arthur Crow]

I'm amazed at this scribe.. it just has all the right ingredients! Loved the word play and mood and was kept glued start to finish. Enjoyed your presentation too, wish more people would pay atention to it.