Birmingham to Stoke

From my 'Train Journey' collection.

Stagnant brook

Fed by seasonal showers

Wading geese

Author's Note

As with all my haiku, it still needs to be revised as I'm still very new to the genre.

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I really like the first two lines. I think they establish a very clear image and a very clear feeling. I think that you could use a long dash between lines two and three. I think you could also and another syllable to that line to add a little extra description and fluidity to the final line.