Fossil Life

never staying put in one person though I have tried

I have proof, patterns of life. 

My efforts imprinted, they wear deeper. 

My body holds the record of everything I've said, splintered paths I've stretched upon, etching them out, dragging myself heavy into patterns, promised.

Left for me to introduce myself as a conglomerate of abandoned inlays strung across like a design, to be preserved.

I'm running out of surface space. 

I'm waning across myself, the soft mollusk belly turns stone 

and I'm left embossed, indented, 

kept as a keepsake in a few hearts.

Reviews

[spiritwind]

I like the longer lines~~they carry the flow of your thoughts. I like the thoughts themselves, their uniqueness, their savor. Excellent poem in all ways.

[eglantine]

wonderful idea you have here, associating the heartplace with where one once was, akin to a fossil, where life once was. I'd break up the longer lines, play with line break.

[stimey]

very abstract, yet pointed. your patterns are simultaneously strange and familiar. this floats, and i enjoy that. thanks for the invite

[eglantine]

Agreed, except for the abstract part.

[Extant]

There's no one part I pick out as a favourite, it's beautiful all over. I love poetry that incorporates science in a fantastical way, as you have done. "Soft mollusk belly turns to stone," an impressive visual image.

[Baby Ricochet]

Yes it does

[Lushan]

beautiful painful yet beautiful.

[James William Dyer]

"Left for me to introduce myself as a conglomerate of abandoned inlays strung across " this line sticks out poorly. But this poem is perfect aside from that....the Reader would like to know why you feel this way, I bet, though, Jacki. I know, the Image I always talked about. You have it now. You really do. 99.9 percent will never get even the Image, now if you can interject more of yourself into the Image, it'll be perfect. I love this poem, I do, I love it, friend of mine. ....But it leaves a question mark....

[James William Dyer]

....not that I know anything special, it's just that I see that Imagism concept in your work, and I think it's great. I have to be entirely honest with YOU. I know you are a great poet.

[JacqMarie]

Thanks Who's Who bullshit just published it lol sigh..