Save your soul

Save your soul. Dont follow 

down the rabbit hole. Save your soul

you must take control

You must be aware. Open your mind 

to what's out there. Open your eyes

be concious to what lies. You must be certain

Don't be fooled by what hides behind the curtain

a guise. Dont let them desensitize. Just keep searchin'

Save your soul. Dont follow 

down the rabbit hole. Save your soul

you must take control

You must get up, do not

by any means let up. Do not 

fall for this. It is a set up. An illusion

Remain alert to the intrusion

Don't be caught up by confusion

Take back the life that your losin'

Save your soul. Dont follow 

down the rabbit hole. Save your soul

you must take control

Don't be misguided. heed who 

you confide in. Don't be 

short sighted. Walk toward 

the light and be enlightened. Q

Be wise,  take bake your life.... 

Take back your life. Claim what is your right

Save your soul. Dont follow 

into the rabbit hole. Save your soul

you must take control

Nov 8th, 2017

Jackie Gunnin

Author's Note

Some inspiration from a little music. All original writing.. Just a certain phrase brought me to this idea. Hope it is enjoyed

Reviews

[Mario Vitale]

Great Read some thoughts :
What works:
I like the moments where there is a rhyme. It gives a presumed end and sums up the lines before. I like how it is structured using terms like moving and bridges, meeting and middle.

What doesn't work:
I find some line breaks both confusing and interesting. Sometimes you can use a line break to change the tempo of the poem, but other times the line break seems awkward. Try talking through the poem and see if the line breaks make sense rhythmically. Other times the line break seems to emphasizes a given word or phrase, but it is not consistent in its usage. If the line break is used at a given point in the paragraph, then it might seem more intentional.

The center of the poem:
The impression I get is of someone who is in the midst of change. They are hesitant on how to proceed and is looking to someone to help them along.

[Jackie]

Thanks for the viewing.:-)

[Nchaks]

Wow, beatifull. I actually almost want to stop writing but this poetry encourage me😊😊 love it!

[Jackie]

I enjoy writing to much to quit. Although i do get quite frustrated cause i want to almost all the time but to often beat myself up over words and the way it sounds.just just gotta stsrt small and go from there

[Nchaks]

Thanks for the advice, I'll try👍👍