Deem

Deem

A Poem by Jackie
"

how could one deem. Say things so mean. so ugly

"

how could one believe

a thought one could deceive

how could one conceive

something so ugly


How could one deem

to

Say things so mean

So ugly


How could one suggest a thought

devise a plan if something was sought

Previse others in case something bad were brought


How could one deem

to

Say things so mean

so ugly


How could one believe

a thought one could deceive

How could one conceive

Something so ugly



Jackie Gunnin

01/13/17

© 2017 Jackie


Author's Note

Jackie
gonna leave this one to the viewers to decide. may be vague but hoping it'll keep ya thinking, wondering...:-)

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This one jarred from the start Jackie. Sorry to say.
It's your use of deem I think. It would read much better if each occurrence of deem was followed by the word 'to'.
hth
:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jackie

7 Years Ago

how's it read now, if don't mind me asking?
Tony Jordan

7 Years Ago

It reads much better.
I find in my head that It's lyrical - and kind of an indictment of a b.. read more
Jackie

7 Years Ago

thanks Tony

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