What a Darkness We Do Make

Sometimes love is actually lust staring out from a dark tunnel.

You know, baby... I'm amazed at the love we give and the love we break.

I'm inspired by the way you ruin my heart, and mend it back together for more.

I'm in awe of your bitter, soulless eyes piercing me. I love you, but what for?

It's funny when I think about it -- what a darkness we do make!

 

You know, dearest angel... I worship you more than your dark void could ever take.

I gaze at you with plutonium dreams hinged high upon the winter of my discontent.

I know we share "a love that is more than love," or so you said in a whistful comment.

It's crazy when I think about it -- what a darkness we do make!

 

You know, love of my life... I find comfort in you, never placing "us" at stake.

The hunger in every fiber of your being craves my touch, making me quake at your lust.

The way you use me, I just know it's love; but then you brush me off like so much dust.

It's overrated when I think about it -- what a darkness we do make!

Author's Note

A razor-to-wrist love poem. :-)
Just kidding.

Reviews

[Ligeia]

The title drew me in, it's quite clever and suave.
I like the repetition in this poem, it helps with the flow and overall 'smoothness' of the write.
This reminds me a bit of Poe.

I see a little Shakespeare in here, I'm not sure if you meant it:
"I gaze at you with plutonium dreams hinged high upon the winter of my discontent."

Either way, it adds to the overall appeal of the poem.
It was one of my favorite lines.

I see a Poe reference too!
YOU'RE BRILLIANT!
Haha.

Keep up the good work! I love this love poem...
and I'd love to see some more, so I think I may check out your other work.
Thank you so very much for sharing.

[xXbloodyVampire]

Unique. I like how you address who you're talking about.
and the repetition holds the poem together nicely.
extremely well written.

[MIA ST. PAUL]

It sucks when you're the only one "in Love" in a relationship, at least that's the way I read this piece, I love the flow and the discriptions you use to describe your emotions. Very nice work!

Mia :)

[Melon Choly]

Love vs. lust - hard to tell the difference many times, as your poem eloquently describes this very well.

I love how each stanza is neatly wrapped up in this line, "what a darkness we do make!"

Well done :)

[razormuse]

oh, this is awesome, the dark is a wonderful place. I am not so much on the theory of love right now..but always all things dark. great poem hun!

[Tallulah]

Amazing. I love how this is written. Very unique. I like the repetition of "what a darkness we do make" it really adds to the poem. My fave part is the second stanza. Wonderful work.

[Voice11]

OMG!!! your note sort of makes sense to me. I have felt this before I have wondered the same things and you just put them perfectly into words!!