What a Darkness We Do Make

Sometimes love is actually lust staring out from a dark tunnel.

You know, baby... I'm amazed at the love we give and the love we break.

I'm inspired by the way you ruin my heart, and mend it back together for more.

I'm in awe of your bitter, soulless eyes piercing me. I love you, but what for?

It's funny when I think about it -- what a darkness we do make!

 

You know, dearest angel... I worship you more than your dark void could ever take.

I gaze at you with plutonium dreams hinged high upon the winter of my discontent.

I know we share "a love that is more than love," or so you said in a whistful comment.

It's crazy when I think about it -- what a darkness we do make!

 

You know, love of my life... I find comfort in you, never placing "us" at stake.

The hunger in every fiber of your being craves my touch, making me quake at your lust.

The way you use me, I just know it's love; but then you brush me off like so much dust.

It's overrated when I think about it -- what a darkness we do make!

Author's Note

A razor-to-wrist love poem. :-)
Just kidding.

Reviews

[Ligeia]

The title drew me in, it's quite clever and suave.
I like the repetition in this poem, it helps with the flow and overall 'smoothness' of the write.
This reminds me a bit of Poe.

I see a little Shakespeare in here, I'm not sure if you meant it:
"I gaze at you with plutonium dreams hinged high upon the winter of my discontent."

Either way, it adds to the overall appeal of the poem.
It was one of my favorite lines.

I see a Poe reference too!
YOU'RE BRILLIANT!
Haha.

Keep up the good work! I love this love poem...
and I'd love to see some more, so I think I may check out your other work.
Thank you so very much for sharing.

[shandi]

Absolute portraiture! Amazing! Makes me want to read the rest of your writings! Wonderful words come from wonderful people! Thanks for sharing!

[Wildfleour]

I think you've described the epitome of unrequited love.

[Amanda Avalon]

Well, if I could give you a badge for Most Relatable Writer of the Week, you'd certainly win!

Isn't it funny/strange how we get ourselves into volatile relationships that take so much out of us, aren't healthy for us, yet, we let them drain us until there's almost nothing left?
This poem spoke to me- what I liked most about it is that you have a sense of humor about the situation, almost as if to say, "Heh!"

What a darkness we do make- indeed! My favorite line... Bravo!

[deeps]

Hmm! I can really feel a binding love here.
It's kind of a twist and spin off really
if you know what i mean.
I can feel the edge and madness.
But yet it is beuatiful as well.
Well expressed emotion here.

[Jamie S.]

Sounds like one of those lip biting lustful but toxic relationships. Ya gotta have atleast one of those in a lifetime or you havent lived!! Another well put piece of verbal art. :) Jamie

[tasha armstrong.]

'The hunger in every fiber of your being craves my touch, making me quake at your lust.'

That is probably my favorite part.
You are much too talented for your own good (lol)
Continue writing beautiful things.

xoxo, t.

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

Your language is great and the imagery is wonderful. It is easy to picture these two people who create such a hateful love and such a loveful hate. The story itself is not a usual one, so it was definatly great to read. The cold heartedness of this woman is so interesting as is the reasons for the man's continuous love of her. I really love the last line of the poem. It really brings it all to a close and it doesn't feel like anything has been left unsaid or incomplete.
Great Write.


Happy Writing.

=YourMidnightSecret=

[closed account]

you know this could be a song!! great write!
YES love is all that, the bitter sweet the happy sad
twisted emotional love!! but it feels soo damn good.....

:--)

[BLACKCRUSH]

"You know , dearest angel ..... I worship you more than your dark void could ever take."
Your imagery is incredibly beautiful. This was one of my favorite lines, it just melted me.
Thank you for sharing such amazing work.