Wing Dance Conversation

I'm currently working on a novel about two character (Knight and Samurai) who wander a wasteland in search of a Dragon. This is one of the conversations they have.

Knight chewed his grass stalk whilst Samurai looked on.

You know bee’s don’t talk, said Samurai.

Huh?

Bee’s don’t talk.

Ok.

Silence as they both pondered this. Knight broke it.

How do they know not to bump into each other?

It’s the wings.

The wings?

Yeah.

The wings tell them not to bump into each other? Knight repeated.

It’s vibrations. They talk through really fast vibrations.

But…

It’s a dance. A wing dance, Samurai managed lamely.

A wing dance?

Wings. That dance.

The sun was setting now, a radiant corona of yellows and reds hovering at the line between land and sky. Knight stopped chewing.

That’s beautiful, he said.

Isn‘t it, we watch it every night but still get captured by the-

They just hover and talk about their day in interpretive dance?

Oh.

I mean think about how we argue all the time and scream and yell when if we could actually read each other we’d live such-

What if you pull their wings off? Samurai interrupted.

Both of them or one?

One.

They’d fly in circles wouldn’t they?

They wouldn’t be able to talk anymore.

Dance.

Yes, dance anymore.

The bee would just wander around asking the other bee’s for help and they wouldn’t be able to understand him.

I think they would cast him out.

Knight shrugged non-committedly. Samurai became reflective.

We walk this place with life in every breath and use it to make such a noise, I don’t think we really-

They’re dying though, Knight said.

What are?

The bees.

Oh. Samurai picked at a stalk but did not chew it. That is upsetting, he said.

Author's Note

I specifically would like input on dialogue and how it's presented and also if you actually understand it! (The lack of speech marks can be confusing).

Reviews

[Taylorgwebb]

The grammar style makes this seem like a poem, which it is, in a way. It is a poem written by two people at once, going for a similar goal but with slightly different paths...
It's a wing dance.

[Supertramp]

Cheers! Thank you for the review.

[Laminators Dubai]

its weirdly funny...for me...i can see just fun and fun...i really dont know what you are up to...but you sound pritty successful to me...
keep writing...its cool..^^

[Supertramp]

It was the first thing I wrote for a book I'm working on. Much of the conversation is like this and there's various pitfalls and trials along the way. Cheers for the comment lass.