My Body The Earth

in the fall 

in the leaves

in the trees 

in the ground

always 

you'll find me 

turning 

around

beneath your very feet

my body will be the Earth

where I wait 

silently 

patiently

stone

Reviews

[Dark Poet]

"The instant the sun
broke past the ridge
you lit out, leaving me ashore."
I really enjoyed how you related nature with yourself in a sense. I wish there was a name for what you did in this poem, but it was truly unique. Rather than just saying someone left, you were descriptive with the Earth so that the reader had a clear mental image with the emotion. Beautiful writing

[Chirag Kumar]

Excellent imagery and a very beautiful poem :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Beautiful imagery..
I was enthralled by the vivid descriptions of the nature and body entwining with each other in time and space..
The emotions laced with the natural events..
Very well penned..
Relished it..!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Well, i like the poem. If ya ask me, i'd say to put the "Me?" in the same line with "Why did you leave" but i guess its part of your style. Well done.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

Yeah no need for the down beat on the me. i guess it only makes it seem more pathetic. i read a few good poems from this other person i cant remember who it is but they have to post in the group its fantastic

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Eh...pathetic is not the right word. Sure, you need to write more so you get better at it, just like all of us, but i wouldn't call your work pathetic. You're off to a good start. Keep writing.

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Deeply sensitive melancholic nostalgic write that I am certain touches the hearts of many who have felt the same. Nicely inked.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

Had to fix it. Tell me what you think

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Beautifully written...soft and gentle flow...thank you for sharing your talent.