garage sale find

a busted-a*s bike
overpriced and never loved
stitched her mind to mine

Reviews

[David Scott]

I usually don't review these snippets of thought as they often are simple and self explanatory...
However, knowing your work a little and stopping to look with an opened mind I see a few interesting observations here.
First, you combine the inanimate objects with a relationship or the personality of an individual.
The bike is a way to play and have fun, but also a way to get around and to see more of the world.
This bike is "busted". Junked experiences from the past adventures of another person's life...
It cost more than one would think because the person does not know how truly "busted" the item available for purchase has become. So, they ask more than they should expect.
Yet you bought it. You took the chance or invested the time and energy beyond a reasonable expectation. The result was a connection melding two as one on a level most will not understand.

Jammed packed with meaning here.
Great job with the few word you chose!

[J_Star]

Wow. You got way more out of this than I put into it. That's pretty excellent.

The bike in question cost $5. The experiences I had with the bike cost pain and trust and love.

Thank you for the review; I appreciate the time you took with it, and it made me see what I wrote in a new light. You're the bomb diggity. Don't let it go to your head.

[David Scott]

Ha, "bomb diggity" works for me... :) Don't worry, I'll keep my day job for sure...

[Dr. Wood ?]

Can't top David's review but I understand what he says and agree....So much inside so few words..I suppose it could be interpreted in MANY ways..like a clever painting....Great stuff

[J_Star]

Thanks, Doc!

[KAOlmsted]

Leave it to Scott to say EXACTLY what I was going to say xD

This is a really fantastic Senryu, J...I can just see you connecting with this find...strike that...I can feel it. It's palpable.

xoxo

[J_Star]

Thank you, love. I'll send you the real story via email.

[KAOlmsted]

...my pleasure and...I know ;-)

[Hilary Adams]

I love the connection between a person and an object. Beautiful, succinct way of rephrasing that old adage, "One man's trash is another man's treasure". I love this haiku!

[J_Star]

Thanks Hilary!

[Rita L. Sev]

What a story this brief piece tells! We find kindred spirits everywhere...

[J_Star]

Thanks Rita! I like the dynamic of the unexpected bringing people together.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Love the thought of the last line. Almost have an idea. :) Excellent read and write.

[J_Star]

Thank you, Brandon.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

You are welcome.