MY PEOPLE AND I

If I come up in life

People are jealous of me

If I am a failure, they take pity on me

I have the guts to face enemies

But I can’t bear sympathies even from friends

I am born to win but not to run away from life’s problems

If there is a problem, I will try to solve it

If there is no remedy, I will leave it

I don’t want to grope in the dark

but I light a lamp and play in the park

 

 

 

Reviews

[Valentine]

Last two lines tell it all..nicely done and felt..Kathie

[lovejulez03]

Well written piece and I love the simplicity of it! Thank you for sharing. It should remind all of us to have strength and not turn away from the hard times.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

These are definetly words that one can live by. Splendid read. Great Write!

[Jvl narasimharao]

Dear Zoe, Thanks a lot for your comments.you are true.I have fallen into the trap of rhyme for the last two lines.They haven't come from my heart
yours JVL

[Zoe Jay]

Bold and elegant. The first three lines are particularly good. It can be very hard not to judge oneself, when we are surrounded by the judgments of others. This is an optimistic poem and represents a strong personality. It is neat and flows well. It's sort of a maxim to live by. The last two lines have a good feel, but are not necessarily as strong as the rest of the poem in my opinion. Overall, this is very nice writing though :-)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A starting point to the possible greatness of you

[KAREN]

Love it! Makes me feel like I can put the bad behind and go with the good!

[Ruth]

Lovely work! We all have to struggle and find that light and be honest...great work!
xx

[A.G Franke]

I like it, I know the feeling of not wanting pity. It's also very hard to walk away from something you know we can't and never will be able to do. I think we all know that feeeling. good write! =)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Sometimes it seems we cannot win no matter what station we find ourselves in but we continue to be a light and be a happy anyway. Excellent JVL