Another lovely piece; I'm becoming a fan of yours. Though it's a sad event, that's life. There can be no life without death; it's how it works. My one issue is your use of a capital letter to start each line. I've been guilty of this too, but now I'm trying to only use a capital when the line starts a new sentence. Since you use periods to end a sentence, it seems odd to use the capital letters in the middle of the sentence. In no way am I intending to take away from the beauty and poignancy of your lovely poem.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks for your kind words. In many ways I am old school, and years ago I was taught that each line .. read moreThanks for your kind words. In many ways I am old school, and years ago I was taught that each line of poetry should begin with a capital.
this was really moving, thank you for writing this. In an odd way, this poem almost makes me feel better about death. More at peace with it.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks. If the poem had that effect on you, it is gratifying for me to know. It's something we all h.. read moreThanks. If the poem had that effect on you, it is gratifying for me to know. It's something we all have to come to terms with, sooner or later.
Our pilgrimage may be short or long upon this earth and our adventures, many or few but we all return to the ether from which we came; the vast mysterious unknown which we hope is more kind and gentle than the suffering we leave behind, both for ourselves and for those which pass before us. Blessings of peace and light. F.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks. Marcus Aurelius said death is just a natural process, and therefore not to be feared.
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If we took our lessons from nature we might begin to understand that nothing ever truly dies. The un.. read moreIf we took our lessons from nature we might begin to understand that nothing ever truly dies. The universe recycles everything. If one doesn't fear being born into this mess, one presumably shouldn't be concerned with leaving it behind. But man is a vain species.
dearest John... perhaps some day we will discover where our Spirit is returned. To dream of what we know has served us for so long... must surely live on. gently, Pat
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks, Pat. I believe life continues, though in what form I cannot say.
My deepest condolences on your loss. With your words you have marked her journey so well. We come from nowhere and slip away into the nowhere and what transpired in between means nothing in the face of eternity. Or perhaps it does. We'll never know.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks. The only way to find out is to look within.
and even sadder when we don't discover ourselves until the very end...
but at least that wisdom might the last breath easier to take.
Sorry for your loss, John.
j.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks, j. I don't know if she gained any understanding or not. I think she just gave up a long time.. read moreThanks, j. I don't know if she gained any understanding or not. I think she just gave up a long time ago.
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and that is such a shame if that is true...
my heart breaks at this.
Sorry to hear of your loss John.
A beautiful tribute for its honesty that we are all just imperfect beings tryong our best to get through the maze of life, with as few wrong turns as possible. So much of it feels so familiar that I've probably looped into a cycle of wrong turns myself, but some things we do have to figure out for ourself, or maybe if I'm a little more optimistic, can just say some of us take the scenic route while others prefer off the beaten path.
Who knows when that next turn will set us straight again. It's what keepsus going.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks, Lorry. Wise words. We do choose the paths we take, if only in the way we look at things.
Sorry to hear about your loss, John. This is a very touching piece... I really was moved by the concept of returning home. From dust we rise, to dust we will return. And all of the troubles in between cease to matter. Technical suggestion... "And she has returned / To that from which she emerged," drop "at last" so you're not using "last" twice in three lines, and the flow is pretty tight... returned and emerged go together like peanut butter and jelly :). Very touching tribute, my man.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks, JR. Interesting how poems can emerge swiftly when emotion is involved. Your suggestion is a .. read moreThanks, JR. Interesting how poems can emerge swiftly when emotion is involved. Your suggestion is a good one. Will adjust.
I am a 79 year old retired human services worker. During my career I saw much human suffering. My writing is geared toward easing that suffering. more..