In her eyes

Purely Fictional

 

 

 

 

In her eyes there’s no forgiveness, in her heart resides a fading ember of trust. She once was a philanthropist of affection, her tenderness exceeding all that I had ever known. Reliant upon her ardent intuition yet charitable to a fault, she excels amorously deep within.

 

I was her champion, the conqueror of all her fears, a light in her darkness, the thought of her in my mosaic dreams simply precious.

In retrospect we were cast into a splendorous seventh heaven that surpassed anything and everything.

 

She was to me a flourishing rose in bloom, a soft warm breeze on a tropical night. When she drew in a breath I exhaled, when she was hurting I felt the pain, when she smiled all was right with the world.

 

Is she lost or perhaps maybe just a dream wandering aimlessly through my insignificant void. Could it be I who is lost without her? Does she really exist? Or am I just a dream within her dreams?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Deron Alexis]

this was beautiful this was deep it was really truly love the terms you used: seventh heaven a dream within her dreams really fantastic I could feel what was being said and when that happens poetry is absolute this is one I could read again and again especially the stanza where she drew breath and you exhaled you know connectivity comparability deep stuff work of art well done

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

Some heartbreaking and beautiful imagery.
'Mosaic of dreams' and 'flourishing roses in bloom'
are beautifully worded imagery.

[Poetic Beauty]

The next to last stanza is sad. To have a great love and then you realize something has went wrong and you may lose her. The details are excellent and the imagery is outstanding. The flow is smooth. A poem in which many can relate to.

[KAREN]

Beautiful poem, but sad! So many emotions flowing in this poem, it cuts you to the core, it's so moving!!

[My Fair Lady]

Feels like a wounded soul with the curtains removed and the doors open. I would say this is your very best yet... going in my favorites.

[J.]

I wish I had words to express how this poetry moved me so. You describe her so vividly! I can almost feel your eyes caressing every part of this woman you speak of! So intensely tragic!

[OT]

very moving!! a poignant ripple throughout this piece - imagery woven through words - a tragic write!! nice!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great work of art! great emotion expressed so vividly!

[Ladysue]

wow Joe, this was so moving and so sad. It filled the page with great sentiment...What a stupendous write. I agree with Emma...this is one of your best!!!

[emmajoy]

Beautifully sad words . you express fiction with knowing, my friend. This is one of your best posts, thoughts wrapped in poetry, poetry wrapped in regret and longing.

'Begging forgiveness, for
which I shall never receive, in her eyes, now cold
and distant I am truly translucent.'

every emotion on display, can't be hidden, won't be shared. This reminds me of a poem by Keats .. must find the title ..