Rivers

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Rivers of tear drops running dry, can you show me how

to cry, as this grown man begs and pleads, a  little love

is all he needs, please won’t you try.

 

Twenty years of solitude, always smiling never rude,

beneath his soul a gaping hole, kept so quiet and

subdued.

 

Does life exist after a broken heart, or does it heal with

a brand new start, someone tell me that its so, its too

much pain to let it show, while I fall apart.

 

Author's Note

Just a draft to see what sticks..any opinions or suggestions are welcome...

Reviews

[T]

Life goes on but it is always hard to let go and believe again....Your writing is so honest and heartfelt. You put your thoughts directly out there with no boundaries.....simply beautiful expressions.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

vastly moving sincerity and complete poetic opening onto the heart and what moves it to beat the deepest~

[Geralyn Miller]

Break it into natural poetic lines, it is illsuited to the prose form.
The idea and the wording are wonderful, keep them intact.
There is life and love after a broken heart, most of us emerge from the heart break a bit more wary and perhaps a bit more fearful.

[Amy Bumpas]

Does life exist after a broken heart or does it heal with a brand new start..yes,
but we never forget. Sometimes there are too many in ones tears and too
many hearts are broken....just a little riddle for ya! :))

[Poetic Beauty]

I would make it a little longer but the whole of the poem is great. The flow and the feelings are wonderful. It is terribly sad and I believe that you can love after a broken heart. It maybe a different kind of love but love is one of those emotions that is magical and unique for it can be different but still be wonderful. This may sound a little strange but i think in my personal opinion I like poems better when the last lines rhyme and the middle doesn't. They seem to flow better to me for some reason but that is only a suggestion. This poem is good the way it is. Just my thoughts. The feeling and sentiment is great and expressed well.

[darkgurl]

A very moving write here, like the picture

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

A great poem for a GREAT poet!

[Cherrie Palmer]

I like it as is, very moving and ..Rivers of tear drops running dry,.. great line makes me think of a dried up riverbed. This was very good.