Choose First

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

She never cared about her own life

she put everyone first, choosing all

the wrong men to quench her thirst.

 

She was born to please, attached

with a curse, she would never find

true love, the meaning adverse.

 

She dreamed of a love so refreshing

so real, caught up in the moment

for a man so genteel.

 

Used and abused for her sexual

deeds, she bows her head down

and finally concedes.

 

I want a life, she shouted, where

true love resides, cascading waterfalls

and carnival rides.

 

Kissing with passion caressing with

devotion all I ask for is some kind of

emotion…

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is beautiful. I think We all Want a little emotion. We as human beings sometimes make wrong choices so we can be pleased, when in truth we should be more patient. And those decisions can often lead to sexual abuse, phyisical abuse like beating etc. I think you've captured the right mood for this topic, and you've done it swiftly and easily. The flow was great, and I see nothing in need of changing or fixing. Great write Love.
With love,
Pretty Blue Eyes

[Cassie316]

This poem was definitely short and sweet! It really reminds me of my sister who was sexually abused. i think you've hit this right on the spot! For a while she really did date all the wrong men, all the jerks, and then was just trying to find someone. I couldn't really honestly tell you what you could do to improve it, because it really captured that personality. So all I can say is good job!! amazing..

[Doreen]

"Strumming my pain with his fingers, singin' my life with his words......"
Very nicely written. I just wonder....how did you know?

[Goodbye]

Oh, Silent Man. Sounds like entering the "silence zone" in a relationship gone so bad.

Excellent write!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

so sad... reminds me of some people i have met

[Marie Harrison]

Wow, what an interesting and powerful write.

[Robin]

so many left upon these desolate sands ~

[Liza]

awwwww....i can't help but feel and remember when i was the person in some of those versus...
when we try to find love outside of us and fill others by voiding ourselves...

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This is so full of powerful emotion, beautifully written.

[Jamie]

This is awesome, because it just is.