Marked Unknown

Is my love but a shadow in this empty grave

poignant and passed over silently depraved.

 

I reach out with affection but try as I might

I’m still despondent everyday every night.

 

Time travels slowly like it deliberately stalls

when speaking of love it doesn’t run it crawls.

 

What would I do if I truly found it, for all I

know I could be all around it.

 

Hearts that bear the scars of trust, or taken

for granted now must readjust.

 

Nothing comes easy when you’re lost and

alone, just snickers and whispers a grave

marked unknown….

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Just another sad write :(

Reviews

[Cassiopia Summers]

I really like this, It reminds me of a story I read by Arra Frost. This piece is wonderful Silent, and I really do love it.

[Water_the_Sun]

I like this a LOT. Still not a fan of the font, but the feeling and flow of the words is wonderful. The lack of proper punctuation in a few of the verses makes them flow so much better. Usually I would suggest changing it, but it seems to have been done on purpose, and whether it was or not it adds a very nice, distinct flavour and makes the poem not *only* smoothly flowing, but also very memorable.


Your work is wonderful... and... I just *have* to say it...

You seem a decent fellow...

[Bee]

You did a good job making me sad, alright. I felt your agony. The grave marked unknown paralleled to unrequited love was just fantastic and fresh. Keep it up =D

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

melancholy sojourn through the tattered heart~

[marcie]

awwww this is very sad. No one should be alone even in death . A touching piece.

[Amy Bumpas]

The last line says it all...Nothing comes easy when you’re lost and
alone, just snickers and whispers a grave
marked unknown….

The picture looks lost and lonely...what's up with these
sad writes my friend? Everything will be OK...come here and
give momma a hug...lol!!

[David W Moore III]

Very well conveyed. The heartbreak is palpable (one minor thing - the lack of commas caused a little confusion at some spots. After a second read, it worked great). Very powerful piece.

[Cherrie Palmer]

You are so good at bring emotions forth. Beautiful work, I loved it.:)

ps dont forget Thurday Night Poetry :)

[Liza]

so poetic
emotional
and heartfelt...

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oh gosh..my heart in heavy :(