Dreamscape

Thunder claps from a mountain high

lightning flashes across the sky.

 

Dreams of sadness flowing all around

broken pieces of heartache fall to the

ground.

 

Damning delusions soil my soul as my

sense of awareness loses control.

 

What dreams are these so deeply

embedded, ill fated and meaningless

sincerely shredded.

 

I shiver and shake as I try to wake

bruised and bitten by a rattlesnake.

 

Naked and motionless I manage to

scream, holy s**t it was just a dream.

 

Reviews

[Sunni Davis]

Such a vivid nightmare. I dream vividly also and my dreams are not always pleasant. This was a terrific poem, dear. Great job.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Thank goodness! Dreams are so fragile are as we...
Light,
Siddartha

[Seshat Nidaba]

I admire your dreams, especially those rhymes, "What dreams are these so deeply" - this line is gorgeous.

[Lily Mae]

Thank God it was just a dream.. wow.. a great write. I love it.. :) x

[Cassiopia Summers]

Wow, definitely something that speaks to me, which of course you already know. Wonderful poem Dear, very creatively written.
My favorite line was-
"Naked and motionless I manage to
scream, holy s**t it was just a dream."

Very very descriptive which creates vivid imagery. Superb job.

[Amy Bumpas]

Good picture LOL! I've had dreams such as these...the things a
mind can conjure...LOL!

[Hustle Consciousness]

lol this was cute and the picture adds to my amusement after reading this scribe because its what i was imagining ....awesome visuals!

[Sports Girl]

This was a great poem. I liked the flow of it. Nicely done

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

fantastically fantastic rhyme scheme with shudder blended well throughout~

[Jen]

Love it.