Mademoiselle

Pricey toys and dangerous boys

oh how it means so much to you

a lavish life so misconstrued…

 

Life’s a game you play so well

baby I can tell, steal your dreams            

from a wishing well…

 

Girl it’s you and only you when you

spread your honey, how does it

feel is it real, you swear it aint the

money…

 

Life’s a game you play so well

baby I can tell, steal your dreams

from a wishing well…

 

No regrets and no one sweats you

just utilize, spin your grace that

pretty face comes with prudent

alibis

 

Life’s a game you play so well

baby I can tell, steal your dreams

from a wishing well straight to hell.

 

Yes life’s a game you play so well, you

cannot break free of this crafty spell

in this life of Carasel dear sweet

Mademoiselle...

Author's Note

I think this is going to become a song, I already have the chord structure
rolling around in my head? What do ya think? Ihave to tighten it up a bit..
I'm not happy with it so far...

Reviews

[Miss Shea]

reminds me of mickey avalon - so rich, so pretty.

[Dinesh Sairam]

Haha, wonderful lyric for a song (I bet The Beatles can tune something great for this, they're good with these kind of songs). Seemed more like a continuation of 'Jebezel' :D Keep writing.

[Marie Harrison]

I especially like it as a song. The song could apply to the modern day girl or one from decades ago. A twist to The Material Girl.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

a song it is~ it spins in bluesy melody such witchcraft~

[.]

well I like it!! and before I read the authors note, I was going to say make it a song..

[Robin]

bang it out , brother

[Geralyn Miller]

Definitely a song.
The last verse is not written to the same level as the rest.Try replacing can't with can not,see how that flows. Delete "going straight to hell" from the 3rd chorus; then repeat the chorus after the 4th verse, Making the last line of the chorus "from a wishing well straight to hell" Then echo, "my mademoiselle." Let me know what you think.