Irreplaceable You

You’ll never know how much I miss your smile.

Each morning I wake alone feeling the impression

left on your side of the bed, empty vacant and

irreplaceable.

 

You were the greatest love, an inspirational elegy

in which my life was composed. I miss the elation

you’ve brought to me in my times of despair, so

affectionately warm and giving.

 

You were my heartbeat my pulse my reason for

being, making me the man I thought I’d never be.

Your absence pains me, pierces me devours me,

with each passing day. I am truly lost hopeless

feebly aware that you’re gone.

 

You’ve taught me many a lesson, how to be kind

yet strong to laugh and be self-effacing, to cry

when it hurts. I’m no longer strong and the hurt

is unbearable it’s intolerable unimaginable.

 

As days become months and months become

years, I faithfully visit your grave with unrelenting

tears. Damn you cancer!

 

Reviews

[bbb]

I love the last line, but it seems to break up the flow of the poem a little. I know, I know--what a critic. It's only opinion. As for everything else, it flowed beautifully, smoothly. Truly a great piece of work, as usual. You know that as a general rule, I love your work:)

[Cristal Bridges]

Only in a poet will you find a man who is okay with expressing his feelings :) I love that you're not afraid to show emotion with this poem. It's beautiful and sad all at the same moment.

As Robin Williams says in Dead Poets Society, "Only in there dreams can men be truly free it 'twas always thus, and always thus will be." This is a great rendetion to a love lost but kept in the heart. Good going.

[Elwina]

Beautiful.
"You were my heartbeat my pulse my reason for being"
...
"Your absence pains me, pierces me devours me"
I love how you put those words that go growing in intensity, it really made me shiver. We can feel how desperate he feels.
This stanza adds a lot of intensity to the poem to my point of view.

"As days become months and months become
years, I faithfully visit your grave with unrelenting
tears. "

Heartbreaking. Beautiful piece.

[Sara Mercury]

"It was almost like a song, but it's much too sad to write..." In this piece, the writer must have learned a lot from the relationship. But as with all things, they have their own season and time for being, and then it passes, and what 'is' must now become "what was," and "what shall become of us," becomes "became." (I have no idea where those words just came from. They just fit somehow.) Very nice poem, though, Silent Scream.

[Gracie-San]

I love the ending line! It kinda jolts you a little at the revelation of how this lover of yours dies. I also love how romantic it is in it's descriptions and emotions. Very good write. :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

devastating~ the hollow left by such a loss is lined with ridges of pain at every memory hold~ it is never fair how sometimes those who are almost a physical part of ourseves~and certainly emotional/spiritual ones are taken away by ruthlesss fate which manifests itsef in different forms~ but none as harsh as lingering illness~
a deeply moving expression of love and loss~and the imprints left in little pockets of empty~

[Cassiopia Summers]

Wow, this is touching. (: I love it, and yes Damn Cancer!!