In Love

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With you, I am invincible, knowledgeable gracious endearing indestructible .

Without you I'm vulnerable indecisive misplaced in a labyrinth of tedious deception.

With you, I have the courage of a hundred men courageous virtuous heroic victorious.

Without you, I cower in the shadows of a tumultuous hell, bending twisting whirling in a pool of despair.

With you, life is worth every precious breath, every waking moment impervious to failure.

Without you life truly does not exist! Emptiness reigns,

overwhelming me to the point of despondency .

With you, every spectrum of passionate being revolves solely around you.

Without you, gray hues bleed irrational musings of an inconsolable loss.

Reviews

[bbb]

You get right to the point in every sentence of this. You don't waste any flowery words, and that makes this poem very strong.

[Iota]

There is nothing like the love a woman to excel a man in his life. With them we are mere humans and with them we walk among the Gods above. This poem shows that starving need for them and hunger to have them in our lives. Excellent write.

[Loner]

Iam speechless beautifully expressed indeed.

[Cassiopia Summers]

"With you, life is worth every precious moment, without you life as I know it comes to an end..." My favorite lines. (:
I love the poem, it inspires me, do you mind if I use the structure of the with you's and without you's? (:

[Sarah McConnaughey]

This is very beautiful, very well written, and full of emotion. Wonderful poem!

[noteverythingisperfect]

This poem is very well written... I find it also very powerful and you used a very good vocabulary, instead of the "norm"

[KatiePie]

This was very powerful. I loved reading it and from my view it is beautifully written and wonderfully constructed. You've got a lot of talent from what I can see, and I hope to read more of your work. :)
-Cathrine

[deeps]

This is so toucing and so very well written

[heich]

i wish someone would say that to me..hmmm..its very real..the words spoke right through me..