This is excellent. I like the theme and how professional you wrote this. You had me hooked from beginning to end. It's a good idea to draw attention to essential words by capitalizing their first letter for emphasis.
"He Bleeds and sees the Living/He Breathes and sees the Inside of the Dying" I like these lines and the philosophy behind the words. Thanks for sharing this amazing poem.
The language is quite intense...as I read this work...the way you paint the scene for the reader --- puts that feel as you wrote this down...about that moment...its intricately design to get at you...would be the point...
You captured it well. Those scenes in your mind's eye and delivered it back to the reader. I very much like your style here. Enjoyed this poem very much;)
Hey, John, sorry for the time it took me to get to this. I really enjoyed this, and I can say I can relate; the world is a spinning sphere of enigmas, and 'The Man' is the riddle, of course it does spin faster sometimes after that fifth, sixth, and seventh drink.
Because of living in a german world, I also often try to capitalize words when writing in another language. I like the emphasis it gives to specific parts of this poem. Really nicely written.
I really liked this, it is well written and it is a shame when people start to see the homeless less as people. This poem gives them a reality, and very well done. Thanks for sharing :)
This captured the essence and feel of the faces I saw when I was in New Orleans. The energy is all but nothing...and then so much more. Excellent write..xo