I fell,

Every morning I wake up to the person in the mirror,

The one person you think you can trust,

But not this time,

This time was different,

When I woke this time,

I was welcomed by numbness?

It was a weird felling,

As I went to get up one thing went through my mind,

I could not move my legs!

I panicked!

I struggle!

But to no prevail,

I had lost,

I had fallen,

 

Author's Note

Sorry if its bad this is my first poem.

Reviews

[sheriH 2]

Good , nicely done I enjoyed it.
good read.
-sheri

[Jade Leilani]

Wow! I am so impressed by this first poem. This poem is shows depth and emotion. I really like it! Always double check punctuation and spelling. Some suggestions would be to change panicked to panic since you have present tense with struggle. Just like the other reviewer, I would add a period after fallen. I would probably change the spelling of felling to feeling. One question is there suppose to be a question mark after numbness? Aside from those small tweaks I think this is an amazing first poem!

[Oran]

Quite a radical structure for a first. Good job. Maybe if everyone could keep themselves from falling like that, there'd be peace and quiet in the morning.

[yuki]

it may be a first but its good :) though I think you mean to put a period after fallen