Chapter II

I had no recollection of what had been done or what had been said when I wore that amulet, it just drove Sally away. I believe it was frightening enough to make her leave or else she wouldn't because I know Sally and she wouldn't leave me just like that..

I decided to study the amulet to learn about the power it has to make it control someone like how it controlled me.

I began recording myself for if anything happens to me, the people would know my story.

The time has passed and the voices are still there and I kept seeing those disturbing visions and their images and its even started happening without putting on the amulet! 

Over time my skin started to pale and change colors, my eyes and my hair turned fully grey and I even started growing a beard when I never used to grow facial hair before!

In spite of these unnatural changes and being all alone for a long time in my very own apartment, I have managed to survive. As my body and mind become more and more twisted everyday by the amulet, I thought that I was "far too gone" to find a new way, an escape of some sort from this clout and mystery, although I really hoped that maybe one day I will recapture my sanity just a little enough so that Sally "My fiancee" would come back and love me again. I am no longer considered as human.. the power and the mutation of the amulet not only twisted my body but my mentality as well. 

Reviews

[matrixmark]

The story of the amulet is an interesting one and I am trying my best to follow it when time permits me too. Even though the chapter is short, you have added in some descriptives which were pretty interesting to read about. I still think there is a long way to go with this story and it will intresting to see where you take it.

This bit - I began recording my self for
'my self' should be 'myself'

The second sentence in the last paragraph needs to be adressed - it is too long.

I can see that you are trying really hard, keep pushing my friend and you're writing will grow.

Mark.

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you mark, it means a lot! Thank you for all of your support! :)

[matrixmark]

Not a problem Joey. I will always try to help out when I can.

Mark.

[Joey Nizz]

Thanks again, I appreciate it :)

[Jes' Pi]

Hello Joey.
First, I wanna put that link in here and I want you to read the article http://theeditorsblog.net/2013/06/07/dont-fake-it-learn-the-craft/

The story is very interesting, but a chapter shouldn't look like that. Keep the ideas in your mind, and try more. There needs to be more action in a chapter, because the chapter you wrote here is too short.
Try hard, you will get good results.

[Joey Nizz]

Thanks J, I appreciate you trying to help me make this better, Ill try my best!

Thanks ^^

[Farhan Shaikh]

Now this is something interesting, beautiful write..
Very good job

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you, Im glad you think so.
Check out the next chapters, I hope you will like them

[Farhan Shaikh]

Yep, i will definitely read it

[Joey Nizz]

Thanks buddy

[Hope]

Amulets are interesting with an air of mystery around them...
Instead of 'changing colors', 'change colors' is what should be used and in the last line instead of "my body mentality", ' my body but mentality' may be correct. Just some suggestions:)
Interesting chapter, Joey.......

[Joey Nizz]

Thank you for you suggestion, Ill give it a change, I appreciate your review and your time to read this.

[Hope]

Oh...
I am so glad 😃