Chapter I

After a long day at the market near my home, as I was leaving an old lady approached me and offered to sell me this medievalish looking amulet, I was in a hurry to take the groceries that I bought back home but she was very adamant on selling the amulet, It looked cool so I was like okay 2 birds with one stone, Ill manage to get her off of my back and ill take home this cool looking amulet, I asked how much do I owe her for it and she said no cash just enjoy the rest of your life with your new amulet, I was over joyed with this and ran home.

As I got home, I called upon my fiancee (Sally) to show her my new amulet, I excitedly showed her the amulet and she became angry because I forgot the groceries where I got the amulet, I felt so bad for forgetting them so I put on the amulet and started to joke around as if I was from the medieval times.

And that's when it all began.. the screams, the visions! I fought with them and shouted and screamed back at them until I realized it wasn't real.. it was was the amulet!

I immediately took it off, and saw my fiancee just standing there right across, mouth open with this strange look, she was looking at me with such a scorn look!

What did I say?

What happened?

What have I done or said when I wore the amulet?

I never knew what happened

But all I knew was

I never saw Sally again..

Author's Note

I dunno give me your feedback, because I am not as satisfied :p

Reviews

[matrixmark]

Where the sentence begins - 'As I got home' - the follow on sentence shows hims showing the Amulet to Sally twice, so you might need to look into that. Also the word 'Amulet' gets mentioned too many times and too close together, so that is something else which needs to be addressed.

So, Sally vanishes becuase of the amulet - this piece does have a lot of legs in it.
Just a suggestion for you - why don't you write out a prologue, which will give some background history.
I am sure you are creative enough to do this. But its just a suggestion.

I did enjoy the story and am intrigued as to where it will go next.

Mark.

[Joey Nizz]

I wrote this separately before adding the other parts and yes you are right there are too many repetitiveness, Ill get on it and fix it.

Thanks.

[Farhan Shaikh]

It is really good it could be better if it is in a longer form.
Perhaps a book.
But then too it is lovely.
I always enjoy your works

[Joey Nizz]

I was actually thinking of making it longer with more chapters, but I guess I might do it now since now I can see that its incomplete by just one piece.

Thank you for your review Farhan, I appreciate it.

[Farhan Shaikh]

It's my Pleasure

[CAPOLAVORO]

Wooow. This one could be great. I don't know it it is fantasy or horror but give it a try to write more. A book could be good for this one.

[Joey Nizz]

I was actually thinking for the longest time to actually make it as book but I dunno. Its all in my head but I dunno how will it come out.

But thanks anyways, I might start it now since you gave me a push :p

[JessyJacob]

How long the game, of shuttle/badminton, foot ball, basket ball, with blind shades, as if invisible, its ok, you can have your own time, where others is thier own time.