Two Sides

Two Sides

A Story by Joey Nizz

Oh man..
Where do I start
I don't know but..
I guess there are just so many things, so many things that are bothering me, so many things that I could cry over in this life.
I used to count on you, not intentionally but you were always there for me when I never even ask, the pride just wouldn't let me call out for you for help but you were there anyways..
I used to rely on you to not be one of the things that used to bother me in my life that YOU, only you knew about.
You always brought me back up
Whenever I was down
And you knew that out of all people
And you used it
Used it to break me and threw me right back down even harder this time from where you picked from where you began.
You did it even harder than anyone that I have ever known..
You just waited.. and waited..
Till you saw the opportunity
And you TOOK IT!
You broke me..
You really broke me...
You knew that i wouldn't see it coming
And you knew where to hit where it hurts and then took advantage
And struck me down when I wasn't looking..
And now I'm all alone..
And now nobody's around
To bring me back up again
Like how you did..

There are two sides of every story
And then there are screen shots.

© 2017 Joey Nizz


Author's Note

Joey Nizz
A lie is a lie
A white lie is still a lie
A half truth is a also a lie
A hidden truth is a lie
A lie by omission is a lie
A lie is a lie..

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This piece is filled with the pain of disillusionment...of betrayal. It is often said that when we love someone...trust them...we hand them a knife and show them where to cut, to inflict the most damage. That makes their betrayal so much more painful! It helps to put the pain into words...to free it...but time is the only real answer. We absorb the pain, lick our wounds, grow stronger...but also begin building a wall for protection. My suggestion with this piece is to reread it...you have some word errors that are an easy fix...example: right back down even harder this time from where you picked from where you began.

I'd also go back and clean up the flow with some punctuation...which will help the reader grasp your words more readily.

A great piece...rich with potential. Nicely done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your great review and understanding what was within these words, and thank you for sho.. read more
I think nearly everybody can resonate with this. Its all about 'trust' and 'manipulation'
It's funny how peoples minds work. You think you know them and then they stab you in the back, even when they are literally looking you in the face.
Yes it hurts but we grow stronger and become wiser to it.
A lie is a lie....yes
But the people which cause the hurt are only lying to themselves. The person on the receiving end, even though they maybe hurting; shpild be able to hold their head up high. And eventually will realise, that the other person wasnt worthy of that pedestal.
Not a review.....more of a comment.

Mark.

Posted 7 Years Ago


matrixmark

7 Years Ago

My philosphy now - if I smell a rat, then I'm off. Life is too short to waste.

Mark.
Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

Well said.
matrixmark

7 Years Ago

Appreciate that.

Mark.
"A lie is a lie
A white lie is still a lie
A half truth is a also a lie
A hidden truth is a lie
A lie by omission is a lie
A lie is a lie.."

As much as I loved the story itself .. this was my favourite part!
A lie is a lie! No matter how you try and dress it up!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

Exactly! a lie is a lie, no matter how small it is, but what to do, people just live on them.
.. read more
"And struck me down when I wasn't looking.." These words really touched me..

Posted 7 Years Ago


Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your review and your comment, you can't really trust having your back facing in front .. read more
You are reading my mind. 😯 Freaky....

Posted 7 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

I guess some of us are going through the same, or my writing was on the spot for you.
Stacy Purvis

7 Years Ago

Totally spot on! 😉
Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

glad that it made you relate.
I liked the conclusion. Truly well said.

Posted 7 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joey Nizz

7 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

You're welcome ☺

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Added on March 27, 2017
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Tags: betrayal, disappointment, granted, taken for granted, taken advantage.

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Joey Nizz
Joey Nizz

Manama, Reef Island, Bahrain



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