Incantation

जय �-ुरुदेव ॐ

Jai guru deva, ohmmm ...

 

And so my tuneless chant rambles and drones

to a one-time iconoclast and idealist,

now just an imaginary image,

fading fast and falling out of sight.

 

Jai guru deva, ohmmm ...

 

Happenstance has substituted martyrs' sacrifices

long, long, long ago. Draconian mud brown dust

and deserted, desecrated graves

are anathema to youthful, wasted and futile idealism.

 

Jai guru deva, ohmmm ...

 

The three crosses on the far horizon, still out of reach,

still staring onto the vast infinity of indifference,

germane to nothing, neither greatness nor generality,

just a mindless, numbing humming in the wind.

 

Jai guru deva, ohmmm ...

Reviews

[Muse]

It's ironic..I'm working on a poem a bit similar.....but it has a darker feel. Despite my Christian beliefs...my demons are talking now. And these voices inspire the best writings for me. So I no longer suppress it...I let it become art. It's funny how faith and beliefs when inspired a certain way, or when penned just so...can be quite beautiful to read and see. I probably made no sense, so sorry. But this writing is on another level of understanding...there's just no words for this. I enjoyed this very much Jeremy. xo

[Rene Velez]

There are areas where a writer will delve and tap into that raw visual state of consciousness that supersedes all words and is transformed into pure art... Well done.

[Leslie Philibert]

This is a very good,quality piece of literature from someone who is used to working with and writing literature.Great vocabulary and powerful imagery as well as lots of thought provoking ideas like the mixture of Christian and non-Christian symbols.
Great job,well done.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Wow, I've missed your work! This has me reeling with thoughts of Jesus and faith , and beliefs! Love the flow, this is a very well written piece!

[joshua deathdealer]

This is incredibly thought provoking. Wonderful work.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Great piece. Has that "Eastern" feel, as if Jesus was inspired and taught by Buddha himself.

[J Todd Underhill]

This reminded me of the spoken word piece Ohm by the great Saul Williams. Should check it at http://youtu.be/rR58GsgFMcY it's a great piece and this one is too, I would love to hear it as a spoke word piece

[Teri B]

It's hard to lose one's faith, and to find, instead of answers, questions that grow larger with time and experience. How can we know truth when we cannot believe? When all that is left seems to be empty ritual?

A thought-provoking piece, Jeremy!