Sentinel

I watch the coffee percolate, then

drink it like a deluge in the desert.

Phantasm of equilibrium squints back

through the mirror of opprobrium,

to offer more misanthropic musings

from within a myopic miasma of misery.

 

Burnt coffee serves only to inumbrate

my outlook, like the dregs of a final shot

to an inebriated sage. A final lapse,

the penultimate attempt to transfuse

a semblance of sense into a senseless situation.

The empty bottle is my eternal sentinel.

Reviews

[Muse]

I love your writings, I have become a fan. My only critique is that sometimes your ability to use brilliant words works against readers like me. I need a dictionary to interpret this. Otherwise I enjoyed what I could taste..........the coffee! :)

[kmartell]

a very wc williams poem, the images very strong, the bottle as my eternal sentinal, so good. and as all of us coffee addicts know...um....what is it we know... we are too very busy...to know...um.... but seriously, I like this kind of poetry.

[Omar Fendri]

Techniques and structures are variously placed here, based on a very rich vocabulary "A final lapse, the penultimate attempt to transfuse a semblance of sense into a senseless situation.The empty bottle is my eternal sentinel." ...
Words are perfectly chosen to illustrate a brilliant imaginary...
I adore coffee myself and I could for a while paint the images in my mind as they were real (for me)... I love it

[Ashley]

Nice job on this!

[Thea]

Creative! Nice and striking poem! :)))

[MS. BABy]

jeremy you write...like no other I so love ur vocabulary

[Midori]

vary interesting. I like it, its different but in a good way.

[Becky C Strukamp]

Very interesting write. I liked it.

[OT]

ooo quite the read - lots of techniques being displaced - sibilance, consonance, alliteration - all used to great effect and I felt myself merrily drifting along the word plays - brilliant vocabulary here - "through the mirror of opprobrium,to offer more misanthropic musings
from within a myopic miasma of misery" - nice!

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i like the way you manipulated coffee into those wise words!
interesting concept!