Requiem for a Fool

My bed is empty.

Empty like my heart,

like the pockets in my coat,

the ones with holes in them.

My house is empty, too.

There is no noise,

just the calcifying veins that

carry hollow ice cubes around

my empty body.

My head is empty.

I can not keep a thought there

before it flies away, unbidden,

stillborn before I see it,

buried in an unmarked grave.

My words are empty.

They have no meaning,

a politician’s words -

like the ‘sorry’ that follows a breakup,

they render me mute.

My life is empty.

Statistics on a resumé page,

lists of people known and places visited,

relationships broken and never healed.

I am empty.

And now I’d like to die.

Reviews

[stars are far]

very nice and well written :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Feelings expressed here in such a manner that I love. Done with intelligence :)

[joshua deathdealer]

I love the pace and feel of this write. Imagery is dead on as well.

[asdarkeyesclose]

Empty like my heart,
like the pockets in my coat,

very strong opening to this poem- some great images, a sense of desolation, of life ebbing away. It is interesting to note what brings us out of depression like this because sometimes it can shape our life.

[Kaidon]

Quite possibly one of the best poems of our time, I can easily relate to this.

[nolaftw]

Great word pace and word choice! It flows really well and I can feel the emotion in the writing. Awesome job!

[Daytonight]

A breakup, especially one that tears you into a million pieces is one of the most terrible things in the world to go through and recover from. But you have to keep clinging to hope...hope in life and love. Great write. Keep on penning and never give up!

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

Wow...powerful writing! I loved this because it takes the meaning of the word "empty" to a whole new level. Your word choice hits hard, is strong, and very clear...wonderful work!

-Brittany

[Chris]

Dying is easy... its the living that's hard. You have to work at what you want and not expect things given free on a plate. You don't always win... but if you don't try then you never will - win or touch ANY dream.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Wow, such deep emotion feel flooded me as I read this, the imagery came to life!