Seeking the Light

Leonard says the cracks exist so the light can get in;

where my stillborn potential distends towards entropy.

But radiance has no release, though it wash away my sin:

my enchantment with ennui, disguised as empathy,

makes unequivocal the devotion that determines my hollow,

empty days. Bedlam enthroned amid humid, fetid thought,

although I have chosen a fervent spiritual path to follow;

random fury was squandered in battles never fought.

 

Armour and shields moulded from fear, hate and despair

cannot be discarded: on such as these my comfort depends.

Yet shall I cast off these chains and make right, tis only fair

to restore and rebuild; to recompense and make amends.

Perhaps, after all, my friend Leonard was right:

I am tired of being fearful; now shall I seek the Light.

Author's Note

Leonard = Leonard Cohen "Anthem"

Reviews

[Dreamer]

The idea of a crack, reminds me that things are never perfect in life. There will always be something that we wish we could remove I would say. Yet, sometimes these are the things that help us keep track of reality. Also, we do get tired carrying around 'armour and shields' because of fear. It kinda makes you want to say "to hell with it all' time to face the music and face what is there. Great piece

[Branch Isole]

The adverbial juxtapositions herein play to a read which could well be the introduction to a fantasy rendition. Good job.

[joshua deathdealer]

This an awesome thought provoking write...captivating to say the least.."my stillborn potential"..Nicely done..xx

[Brad Nugent]

Such a powerful poem with a positive ending. Facing fears, finding courage and searching for the light. Your language knowledge is awe inspiring.

[kmartell]

Good spiritual mood enters, light is both a truth and a metaphor. Chains, and light and restoring of something you want back? It is good to keep going like this and to end with courage. "Anthem" is a good song for your poem.

[Lane-roe]

Lovely work! Great imagery, and a wonderful flow :)

[Sunni Davis]

Beautiful imagery and inspiring words. I especially love the last line; so powerful and hopeful.

[Audrey Howitt]

Difficult when the armour we construct is that that also undermines us. So well done Jeremy. I love your work and hope to read much more of it.

[Stonewall]

I wish this made less sense to me. Great write.

[Pretty Faces Split Open]

Well done, the whole thing felt like an unfolding