A Covenant with Death

My friend, where have you been?

You were supposed to have come for me

      - by now.

 

I think sometimes I embarrass you;

      My gauche countenance,

      consistent with clandestine charity.

 

An avid follower of fashion like you -

    adamant that neither fear nor favour

    will dissuade you from enlarging

    your circle of acolytes!

 

(Note to self: Don't let a passionate promise

    addle your soft little brain.)

 

Come, my friend, I am willing, and waiting;

    why are you so wary?

 

Let me consummate our covenant;

Let me prove myself worthy

Let me dream of evermore,

     with you.

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

this is really nice, i enjoyed this, love the title, it caught my eyes; the note in parenthesis is interesting and different i think. I liked the beginning lines, and also:
"Come, my friend, I am willing, and waiting;
why are you so wary?"
and the last stanza :D hehe

[Brad Nugent]

Nice work, JB. I love the feel of conversation mingled with self talk. This set of words was challenging - I am still to tackle them - yet you have used them so effortlessly!

[Joiedevivre]

hmm this is so interesting, makes me wonder are you talking to death? Are you talking to a lover? is death the promised lover? If so does it follow fashion? can it be death you're talking to? Maybe it is he person that could imply a death through drowning in passion? Interesting.

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

(Note to self: Don't let a passionate promise addle your soft little brain.) I love this line, it just stands out to me. This poem is full of a romantic fool with a beautiful flow. : )

[Emily B]

I had to read it twice. I could stand to read it several more times to let it all soak in :)

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It's like hearing someone's thoughts; or listening to a conversation in someone's head. It definitely makes for an interesting read.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Jeremy you did a fabulous job with our words.........I am a bit afraid of them myself. Maybe tomorrow. Love this!

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a very deep thought and shows that the narrator knows this person is slightly ashamed of them because of their appearance but the want to be with them all the same. show that they are worthy.