Glimpsing God

Glimpsing God behind the cusp

of a technicolour rainbow,

the colours left over from

our conversation, a one-sided

exchange which drew not blood

but disbelieving hope.

My red, dangerous desires,

my yellow fears,

burnt orange anger,

fresh green dreams and

deep, purple-blue tears,

tailed by the ultra violet promise of tomorrow,

all paraded before my eyes and soul

with indistinct understanding eluding

my outstretched heart, until

at last the colours dissolve and

disappear. And with it,

all potential, dreams and promises

shrink and escape into the ether.

But at least the sun is now shining.

Reviews

[nazia]

The vivid rainbow of emotions that you created provides a freshness to the work.. beautiful piece :)

[Jeremy Baker]

Thank you Nazia!

[Helen Crutchett]

I loved this poem Jeremy. I loved how you had a the colours interweaved throughout. It was a soul write, full of light, promise, and hope.

The colours dissolved in the end.....but a vision as you have seen never looses it's impact....the seeing of the sun is testament to that!

Top write my friend,

Kindest regards,

Helena

[Jeremy Baker]

Thank you for your kindness in reviewing this, Helena, I value your comments and thoughts!

[Dreamgirl23732]

I loved the creative twist added to the poem. Truly amazing!

[AprilRN1210]

Isn't this a colorful write! I like how you give color to emotions... kind of like a "mood ring" of sorts.. those always used to intrigue me.. or how people talk of "auras" surrounding people with different colors representing their "spirit"... have read several interesting things on it... what exactly is "disbelieving hope"? is this not a contradiction of sorts?.. love the idea of "indistinct understanding eluding"... something about that phrasing tickles my intellect... what a way to end this.. silver lining in a darkened world of realities... those dreams, potential, and promises shrinking.... wait... come back... don't go.... who needs the sun shining if we don't have that understanding, that hope, those dreams, that motivation, those promises of tomorrow... it is just a well lit empty nothingness that illuminates and highlights the fact that life has no meaning... what a sad thought... jeez... for a colorful write, it sure darkens my heart...

[closed]

This is really cool. Its penned much as a literary blur so it challenges you to keep up

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Wow! I love the imagery, this left a mark upon my brain to savor and ponder upon for many days! Excellent poem!

[Jeremy Baker]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure!

[Lane-roe]

Love the imagery - can't get much closer to actually seeing a poem than this!

[Jeremy Baker]

Thank you for your lovely comment :)

[uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns]

How neat to use colors to help you describe this, I think I could really see/feel what you were trying to show. Amazing write, it's really inspiring.

[Jeremy Baker]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts, I'm very flattered!

[An owl on the moon]

How you paint your emotions with such vivid expressions on your canvas... rich and deep and alive... and though there is still the searching soul, the sun has broken through the shadows... Brilliant...

[Jeremy Baker]

Thank you Craig for your generous review, it really gave me a lift. Much appreciated!

[Ruth]

Oh, yes!!! Stunning :) There is light to be found even through the breaking down of hopes and so forth, good to read you again love! x

[Jeremy Baker]

Thanks Poppy, I'll be catchng up on your latest soon too!