Snippet *5

One of my friends has been manipulated by teachers trying to get her to do what they want; some even sexually. I was sickened so wrote this.

Euphoric; away from needles

Digging into your brain. Eating

Away at the things you hold close.

Words slither from their mouth

Brainwashing you. They are teachers;

Making you dance to please their appetite.

Reviews

[Lorraine]

Short but brilliant. The words just flow out naturally to express such strong descriptions. The theme is already gruesome in itself, but you managed to take it into a whole new level, where some teachers' disgusting actions were expressed with greater impact. Well done, indeed.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Ameerah]

ur poem is great!! i love it

[Faith]

amazing job john, it really made teachers seem like animals...your point really came out perfectly.
"Making you dance to please their appetite."
- i absolutely love the last line, perfect ending.
such a strong piece.
brilliant write : )

-Faith♥

[BluesForTheRisingSun]

Wow. This was very powerful, extremely poignant. By far the best of the snippets. Excellent write :)