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This one is about the resent swine flu virus that has gripped the world.

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Domino people fall in rhythm

when swine touches them. Consumed

they scream. Dominos hit the floor.

Spreading like flu they die.

All fall down when the finger strikes.

We are all pigs to the slaughter.

Author's Note

This was written about the Swine Flu virus that has consumed the world. By the way we fear it not by the way it actually have gotten us.

Reviews

[Andrew (not Andy, A.J. ..]

I don't like this one as much as the other ones. I mean, REALLY. The Swine flu(I believe anyway) is just a lot of hype. Thousands of people die from the normal flu, whereas the swine flu has only managed a few hundred. Bah. It's not that bad. No-one has died around where I live from it, and there have been several cases. Why do you say it has consumed the world? If you think the world is coming to an end from swine flu...we-ell all I can say is worry no more, it's dying down anyway. Anyway, sorry. I'm just grumpy right now.

[John Morris]

This is about how we are consumed by the fear of swine flu not how swine flu has been consuming us.

[a]

WoWoW! Amazing write! This is shockingly genius! Pure lightning!
Thank you very much!
(sorry that it took me so long to read this)

[Faith]

i liked this one a lot.
i loved how you compared the victims of swine to dominos, and the flu taking on a domino effect of death, brilliant.

"We are all pigs to the slaughter." - the last line was simple yet, such a dramatic and deep ending.
excellent as usual...

-Faith♥

[Legion]

I resent that remark. Or is it resemble? I always get that confused. Interesting piece though. Although, the swine flu is a lot less dangerous than many other types of flus out there. I have that rare strain that is a cross between swine and avian fly. It's the flying pig flu.

[BluesForTheRisingSun]

I love these snippets, they seem to become more descriptive and interesting as they progress. I also like how you use topics and issues, it adds to the effect if the reader can relate and/or truly understand what they're reading about...if that makes sense.
Anyway, excellent write :)

[April Child]

Topical, well delivered. I'm liking your snippets!

Just a small observation, might want to lose the second "domino"...

[lindsay]

i like how you used the swine flu to show how humans got all bothered by it and eventually consumed them.

so very true.