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Britain's Rain. Filling in every crack stalling our day. Anyone see the comparision to the government (You may only get that if you live in England at the moment.)

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Trickling down the murky windows,

water seeping through cracks

On the surface. Pores materials filled

By an avalanche of blue droplets.

Buckets load, England’s always like this,

A day’s labour just trickles away.

Author's Note

This is meant to symbolise the way the labour party is filling our lives with rain. Britan's typical weather. the rain is plentiful of ideas in no short supply but it all just trickles away; failing eacg time. Yet, it gets into everyone's lives and gets into anyone's problems 'pores'

Reviews

[BluesForTheRisingSun]

This was excellent. Truly.
Though, if I may say, you stole my rain rant idea! only joking, though I was intending to moan a little about the rain (though, I can't exactly compare my standard to yours)
I live in England you see, and this past week, I can confirm, has been sh*t (weather wise) Welcome to England. Can't wait till half term.
ANYWAY. sorry, just rambling on. This was great, excellent write.

[Crowley]

Great crossover form the everyday real to a political point of view. Well put I think and well written. Nice job.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Very poignant piece. I can't exactly relate to the politicaler (not a word) of the points, but it's a good piece regardless. It's like multi-dimensional in that it's written well whether you're looking deeper or taking it at face value. Makes it a VERY good piece. I enjoyed thoroughly. GREAT WRITE!
KH

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Ah! That was a very clever Metaphor and your words really conveyed that idea perfectly.
Brilliant read!

[April Child]

Nice metaphor, yes we are in a downpour! Punchy little piece.

[a]

The last two lines flashed me, outstanding, stunning!
Thank you!

[emmajoy]

A clever write not only in content but in its brevity. Sometimes too much is just too much but, because of the symbolism you've said how it is. Maybe more rain will wash away a few of those sitting in high places!

[Sel Whiteley]

I like the symbolism in this poem, how you use weather to show how much labour has changed, 'trickling down the murky windows' and 'an avalanche of blue droplets' are perhaps the best lines.

[Lexi Nicole]

Very nice. Great symbolism, nice imagery, even flow. I love how you used the weather of Britain to describe Britain's labour party. Wonderful write!

-Howl

[~LeeAnn~]

Rain, rain, go away......
This is a very symbolic poem....its great....

[Legion]

That's pretty much like it is here too. Well said.