Snippet *1

A short poem with no name

Snippet *1

Surrounded by blurred noise,

Sinking swiftly into the abyss,

Down I fell. My stomach lurched

thrown against my body’s wall.

Upside down I saw the world.

Before coming crashing down.

Reviews

[Nobody.]

Nice description....went there with you.

[Crowley]

I felt like this just last week.....its amazing how you can block out anything else that is going on around you cuz the task at hand is all consuming...good write.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

I enojoyed this snippet. Very descriptive. I don't particularly like the flow of the last line... It kinda messes with the rhythm... But it was a fun read.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Eh! This was very well penned..
short but yet so vivid and deep!
Great work :)

[Lorraine]

For such a short piece, it's very detailed. The poem was so vividly written that I could almost feel the burst of exhilaration. Very wonderful and an enjoyable read. Great Poem.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[April Child]

Hmmm I know the feeling. Of course now I am intrigued to know what happened... Nice snippet.

[~LeeAnn~]

What were you doing?...skydiving?....
I agree with the other this is very intense.

[Ralphy]

this is good John, "emotional impact" might have been a good name. I love the expression in getting me to see your world...

[danni.]

intense. well done :]

[An owl on the moon]

Deeply moving, down into the darkness of heart and soul. Profound and vivid...