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For William Blake

a day is promised

says a Book

prophet's path

a writhing worm

on

a

hook

cast a net

but stay and look

a mountain sings

there's a running brook

horses go mad

enter

the librarian's nook

a Sunflower Sutra

CIVILIZATION TOOK

flowers grow

and

flowers cry

you never stopped to wonder why

carry the stone

an exasperated sigh

crucified in my mind

with the lonely, bitter, and unkind

to live is to die

why rise and try?

a sacred story, there's only One to find

pride of Kings?

What is the pride of a King?

it's all of this

and every other thing

Author's Note

Back on my meds. Still like this one.

Reviews

[Papaya]

Reads like a contemplative piece on existence and the search for meaning and truth.
I like the use of line breaks to emphasize the thoughts and the control the flow.

[John Sullivan]

It very much is, it's an admittedly strange piece from a strange headspace. Been trying to work on my rhythm-by-way-of-line-breaks... trying to find a flow of sorts. Thanks for reading

[Papaya]

Experimentation is good and so is having your own style. Sometimes the strange and abstract pieces are the best art. They're the ones we ponder on...

[Stella Armour]

A strange piece indeed my friend, but it is good to be different and i enjoyed reading very much :)

[John Sullivan]

It is admittedly strange, but I was in a strange headspace while writing it. Thanks for stopping by, friend

[Stella Armour]

you are welcome John, i have to admit changing my mindset often when i am writing to some strange far away places at times .... :))

[John Sullivan]

I hear ya, I almost took this one down but you know what? I used to work as a student journalist, and if I am cracking up, I might as well document it in as honest a fashion as I may. May it be interesting, if nothing else!

[Stella Armour]

you make me smile in a nice way😊
just be true to yourself and you won't go far wrong...

[John Sullivan]

Ahahah, you're most kind. Thank you for your thoughts

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Nice, good work.
Enjoyed reading this piece.
Keep it up, take good care.

[John Sullivan]

Thanks. I was a wee bit mentally unstable at the time of writing, but sharing is caring, as they say! Thanks for reading

[The_Ancient_Rock]

You are most welcome.

[Neville]

You have quite the gift of the gab if you don't mind me sayin & aint a bad powet neither .. Neville

[John Sullivan]

Awww, feelin' chatty today. I scribble my little words on the paper just like the rest of us. Thanks for reading, Nev

[Sami Khalil]

I like the questioning and the meditative take on life, religiosity and so forth; we learn by thinking, experimenting, analyzing, comparing, sifting through and making our minds up.
Kudos!

[John Sullivan]

Thanks Sami! It's all one big schizo mess up in the clouds, but the good Lord gave us reason as you suggest. We must question and meditate, or contemplate, maybe initiate, but never imitate. Or something. Cheers friend!

[Sami Khalil]

I agree wholeheartedly. Think before you leap, or leap before you think; your choice.

[John Sullivan]

But make a choice, that's for sure. Something maybe I need to be doing more of these days. Stagnation is real. Cheers.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe @
You are welcome sir.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I like the disjointed nature of the couplets and the choice to use rhyme to hold it all together.

[John Sullivan]

Thank you kindly Mr. M. I'll be the first to say, it's a strange piece, and not my best work, but I figured I'd post in anyways. Always working on my rhyme scheme. Thanks for reading.

[Soren]

This poem with religious metaphor goes deeper still and holds some double meanings. Very nice.

[John Sullivan]

Yeah, I'm a person with paranoid schizophrenia, so the line between psychosis and what some would consider spiritual experience is... blurry. An attempt at societal critique and some big picture stuff, though not a great attempt. Thanks for reading, Soren

[Soren]

The line between spiritual experience and reality is blurry for most all. A critique of religion itself is nothing more than that of society as well.

[John Sullivan]

A really nifty point Soren. It is in its fashion a critique of both, though I must admit I don't think this is my best writing, and considered taking it down. As it is it might be time to talk to my doctor lol. Space is the place.

[AYVID N]

to live is to die
why rise and try?

Such a great query. Many have wondered yet no one found the answer. I loved the poem for its deeply philosophical touch, the existential question and the great imagery and fluid rhyming. Looking forward to read more of your poetry.

[John Sullivan]

Thank you so kindly Ms. DIVYA! Been skirting somewhere between psychosis and spiritual meditation lately, thinking a great deal about the big questions. Thanks for stopping by :)

[AYVID N]

I love thinking too. It's a pleasure John. :)

[Betty Hermelee]

The happenings of nature, time goes by ; flowers do cry…for nourishment, but they must hide their pain……” to live is to die”….. that doesn’t give much hope, nor does the king….but what do kings know anyway?
Nice piece
Warmly, B

[John Sullivan]

Ahahaha, fair enough. 'Twas a complicated piece from a complicated headspace, might even take it down... the fine line between psychosis and spiritual experience... and plenty of reflection on the current state of boys and girls, and how often terrible they are to one another

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome John!
Warmly, B

[Thomas W Case]

Fantastic work. You paint the scene well.

[John Sullivan]

My thanks Tom