This one is for the bones

 Sitting here on the bones

Hollow eyes blankly stare

Though mindless they seem to be

Their restless thoughts fill the air.

 

Lying here amongst the bones

I hear the chatter, and a clattering

Though in here I'm all alone

I believe I am more or less

Though I hear at least

The pitter pattering of little feet

Echo behind the walls of darkness

 

I think it may perhaps be the bones

Speaking subtle languages

 Silent whispering

Muffled sounds through covered bandages.

Helpless cries of mumbled torment pleading…

 

 But they are only bones

Staring with hollow eyes

Inside...

 Worms and maggots writhe

That clatter, pitter patter tiny skeletal feet

Into the night.

           J.L Hunter

                                    (This one is for the bones)

Reviews

This is rather beautifully deep, and to me almost "an out of a body experiment" or experience. You hear every single little sound, as you are the wind, around you, and try to give it a place, this is greatly written, and had me hooked from beginning til the end... fantastic J.L. A hundred for for the bones ;-) from me... you get.

- Elisa

[Hello, Goodbye]

I love vivid yet dark poetry. Great job with the effective imagery.

[Rachel Anderson]

I like this a lot. The imagery is amazing. Great job!

[J.L Hunter]

Thank you. That's what I was going for :)

[Mark]

A dream-like (or maybe nightmarish) work. I felt a sense of uselessness, resigned hopelessness.

[AprilRN1210]

This is an extraordinary piece of art! I love the esthetic dimension. Your creative use of language with stunning, vivid imagery heightened the echoes of these scary images and sounds. I could hear the muffled tormented cries, the clattering, the pitter patter. The way you layered the ideas through repetition, slowly increasing the intensity kept me captivated and left me wanting more. It was eerily enchanting and psychologically compelling in a dark, sinister, want to look away but can't sort of way. I loved it:)

[Quill~]

Although this is a haunting poem, I give you credit for making it a thrilling read as well!
I really enjoyed reading this. :)
Clearly, you know how to captivate the reader. Kudos, Joshua!

"But they are only bones

Staring with hollow eyes

Inside...

Worms and maggots writhe

That clatter, pitter patter tiny skeletal feet

Into the night."