Grinning Moon

still in working progress, but I'd like to know what people think of it so far :)

Moon is grinning, nearly laughing,

cracking, looking, watching

Fate is cruel, fate is blind

Hollow hearts, hollow socks

Taunts with silent mock

Night is thriving, really shinning,

blazing, feasting, eating

Fate is small, fate is tame

Silver lock, silver smile

Truth is telling lies

Lore is lacking, never learning

teaching, rusting, rotting

Fate is servant, fate is god

Lazy star, lazy toast

Death is playing host

Reality is dawning, really turning

crashing, rushing, coming

Fate is left, fate is right

Growing tact, growing cake

Wake the fire drake

Mercy is hiding, really shaking

trembling, cowering, peeking

Fate is dream, fate is sleep

Sneering eyes, sneering veil

Hope is setting sail

Day is fading, nearly fleeing

running, seeking, searching

Fate is lace, fate is rot

Glitter teeth, glitter gold

Has an iron hold

Humanity is breaking, really losing

failing, falling, slipping

Fate is stuck, fate is still

Swelling pride, swelling hole

Plays the trixter's role

Dread is waiting, never leaving

sleeping, snoring, waking

Fate is weak, fate is lost

Rotten apple, rotten stone

Time picks flesh from bones

Moon is laughing, really cracking

grinning, watching, looking

Fate is dead, fate is gone

Lawless hat, lawless sin

Once again is King

Reviews

[YanZeros]

Very nice! I enjoyed reading it the format is really unique and the rhyming is wonderfully done! lovin' this poetry Kim! :)

[Kim]

Thank you! :)

[YanZeros]

you're welcome! :)

[S.F]

It was really easy to read and flowed together really well. The 3 word rule is something i have a hard time with but you did it so well!

[Kim]

Thank you, glad you liked it :)

[MelissaAndres]

Love your title and then how, toward your ending your line, ' Moon is laughing, really cracking'. Nice job with this!

[Kim]

Thanks, glad you liked it :)

[MelissaAndres]

You're very welcome!

[Saddam]

Humanity is breaking, really loseing
failing, falling, slipping
Fate is stuck, fate is still
Swelling pride, swelling hole
Plays the trixter's role

It is fantastic and near to perfect write dear friend.

[Kim]

Thank you! :D