My path

A person, confident in both heart and mind, who will not follow anyone down a path that's not for her

May darkness take my heart, where the faintest light shines the brightest

and to winter's night be bound by hope of spring

The howling storm of snow and ice

shall be the chaos in which I thrive

My friends shall be with me

Together we'll course through summer and spring

Adventures, hope and dreams all unchained

Trapped in nothing and free from bane

Golden light of sun and stars shall light my way

Whether you see me as the shadow's shade or the candle's burning flame,

I shall have the time of my life and re-write whatever fate

Because I refuse to be bound by jealously's hate

Be my guest, I dare you to try,

but this path shall be mine to make

and not your's to dictate

Author's Note

This is just a quick scribble so I haven't spent much time refining it, but what do you think?
Also, please ignore any spelling mistakes :)

Reviews

[Walker Andreasen]

"May darkness take my heart, where the faintest light shines the brightest
and to winter's night be bound by hope of spring
The howling storm of snow and ice
shall be the chaos in which I thrive"
Your opening stanza captivated me with it's deep complexity and metaphor. From the surface this stanza alone tells of how in the craziness of life you're always looking for the light; pure optimism! But the deeper you take the metaphor, the more entranced the reader is!
"May darkness take my heart, where the faintest light shines the brightest/ and to winter's night be bound by hope of spring" Your heart, soul, bound by the furies of chaos, only to know that in the midst of it all, the light and warmth comes from within, not what you can find on the outside. That in the midst of chaos, you make your own hope and light to reach for, which brings you warmth.
"The howling storm of snow and ice/shall be the chaos in which I thrive" ...in which you thrive. You don't live in it, happen to be in it. It doesn't hang around and you pass through it, you THRIVE in it. You love storm of chaos, embracing every punch it throws, savoring every lash because in the end, it makes you stronger, better.
You go on with your friends commitment to journey with you through chaos' fierce and icy storm. But with them at your side, you only recognize the good. chaos has no penetration on you. You draw the strength from them like a coat to ignore the icy wrath.
And then where ever you are, what ever the situation, light will always be there. you disregard how people may interpret the way the light hit you, because you, "...have the time of my life and re-write whatever fate". Their opinion doesn't matter because you, "...refuse to be bound by jealously's hate". But what is there to be jealous of? The fact that you shine? Or the fact that you're in the shade but still move forward? Undaunted by it's darkness because YOU hold the light within you, a thing many can't seem to grasp, or won't.
And then the end. The end is driving. The end is near perfect(because no one is perfect) but it's as close as it can be. It's taunts the world to strip you of your path or light. Because it's your light. It's your path. Not theirs. And you have every right to be selfish with it. You dare them to, knowing they'll fail because they don't possess the inner light, the inner summer to look forward too. The don't posses the coat, the shield of friends to blockade the icy wrath of worldy chaos in your path. Nor do they possess the power to change it because only you, "...shall have the time of my life and re-write whatever fate".
By far the longest review I have written and the highest rating yet. Shelved in my favorites, and I will send it around. Me, personally, this is one of the best poems I have ever read. My favorite by far. You probably didn't mean for it to be so deep, as you said it was a quick scribble of emotion and words that came to you and you wrote it with a superficial meaning. To take it how it is. But how would I know it to be superficial? I'm just the reader, and I can read it as deep as I want.

[Kim]

I'm honored, thank you! :D

[umair]

THE THING I LOVE ABOUT YOUR PATH
IS THAT YOUR NOT ALONE
''My friends shall be with me
Together we'll course through summer and spring''
I WISH I COULD BE LIKE YOU

[umair]

nice path you have there :)
it looks like heaven

[Roger Turgeon]

My first impression was this was a vision of after-death. The darkness and chaos taking you...being with friends that I had assumed were departed... and yet I'm taken to a place of strength, hope and determination. Live on.

[Kim]

Never thought about it like that actually :)

[Chloe_Spence]

I really like this poem- it is deep and meaningful :)
It has a lovely flow :)

[Kim]

Thanks! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the complete poem.
"Be my guest, I dare you to try,
but this path shall be mine to make
and not your's to dictate"
The above lines should be the rule for the all of us. Better to walk your path than follow the people blinded and being a follower. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kim]

You're welcome :) thank you!

[A. H. Pinley]

Golden light of sun and stars shall light my way. Omit the word and. The piece flows nicely. Good work!

[Kim]

Thank you!

[ron]

It sounds great. Love how it flows and lets the reader know your path is yours and not anyone else's to make for you.

[Kim]

Thanks, glad you enjoyed it :)

[ron]

You are most welcome :)

[Sami Khalil]

"Golden light of sun and stars shall light my way

Whether you see me as the shadow's shade of the candle's burning flame,

I shall have the time of my life and re-write whatever fate

Because I refuse to be bound by jealously's hate"

You rise, chose your path and take the blame and responsibility. A wonderful write...:)..........................

[An owl on the moon]

There is a beautiful strength that rises in your words.. so filled with hope... and light.. and the pathway you alone choose for your life. Powerful!

[Kim]

Thank you :)