Huh-hI-o

Just an intro. to me, cause I'm new and felt like fiddling.

I've been reading Ancient Greeks

Thinking they're tragic and scary

Thinking they're like saber toothed lions

But they're classical...

I'm walking the feet of history,

Looking down at my own --

They smell like ground sand paper,

It makes my teeth and gums mash

And my nose would be wrinkled --

If it could twitch.

I hope your still there

getting to know me....

like constellations passing by,

looking for Hope in Ships --

born for wreckage. 

I was hopping to connect --

With you....or maybe not,

because if your anything like me

Your floating across these waters

on a barely adrift raft

The words of your peers,

waves beneath you barely notice

As you stare forward at the horizon,

Hoping someone will save you like --

seeing your words

So I'm going to try to be good --

Matey, and read your words 

Beautiful words beneath my raft afloat,

And try to treat you as my kin, kin as you be

-- Happily. 

Io, in Ancient Greece, was running rampant

and wild -- alone, and I think...

how lonely she must've been before 

she met Prometheus,

My favorite Greek character

And....I feel like Io:

Wandering the whole world

Looking for....my Prometheus

And my RiveR

Reviews

[Ookpik]

Well, Huh,

This was pretty fun to read - came across a lot like a journal entry, and there's a kind of authenticity to that that's hard not to notice.

I like Prometheus too, though the whole liver ordeal made me feel as though he'd wound up with a pretty s****y lot. Thanks for posting, H, and welcome. I'm sure you'll meet some good people here.

-Ook

[Huh]

Thanks, looks like I'm off to a good start with you ;) The site is actually pretty amazing, I owe the styling/form to another author, Satish Verma. Without reading her poems I never would have gained the perspective to write more... narratorial-ly. I've done 'journal-entry' poems before, just for myself, but never a poem just to have a fluid and integral story. If any of that makes sense. Satish Verma poems are amazing and admirable, they convey the messages I'd like to send out, but more in a narrative style than I do. I'm usually first-person, action based poems on a journey inward.

And yeah, the whole liver thing is disturbing, but I've come to see as the Greeks way of redeeming everything, "Yeah, the world can suck and be least fair to the best, but at least they're still there (Prometheus never yielded under it)".

[Ookpik]

That's a pretty reliable way of looking at it - the Greek myths were all pretty dark, especially the tragedies, but if you pull a moral out of them like that I'd say they're still probably well worth reading.

I'm a bit of a black sheep here, and rarely review, but I know Satish's work and think she's as solid an inspiration as any. John the Baptist, too, is a really nice guy - really caring, and will consistently provide honest feedback.

Once again, welcome. : )

-Ook

[Huh]

That's hilarious, John the Baptist is the other fellow author on the site that I have been examining most.

And I don't know, Prometheus's story is the only Greek story I TRULY find redeemable. Io's story I chop up as a way to teach young Greeks geography.

I did look through your profile and "..."s, what I've read is really good. I take it your approach is more of a self-satisfying journaling/though-sketching? Sometimes some seemed like precursors to a whole bigger narrative

[Ookpik]

Lol no, I saw that shortly after I wrote here - there's a recent comments page on the writing section of the site, I know him and was pleasantly surprised to see you commenting on his stuff.

And I hear you - stealing fire for the benefit of humanity is definitely a redeemable act (even at the expense of one's liver). If I'm being honest, I don't know Io, though I'd be tempted to do a little research to find out.

As for mine, I don't know - they are what they are. I like the imaginative act of writing them (you're right, I often see more then I leave on the page) but it feels more like drawing to me, or like doodling in a scrap book.

I just enjoy doing it, and getting read or reviewed isn't really part if what affects that.

[Ookpik]

I've got to turn in here, but I'll keep an ear to the ground for more of your work - I like your style, I knew of Io (the white bull, and one of Zeus' many side girls) but I'd never registered her specifically

Lol - happy writing

-Ook

[Ookpik]

Heifer****

[Huh]

I get that, that is what my poetry is for me more often than not. All through my life, I've drawn spirals sketches, eyes, and....I write because I see grand things (things without form) and I can't express them just right any other way (that is, what I can express of it :) )

My earliest writings were just scenes, usually trails with light up ahead, the unknown and beautiful, full of possibilities. But....There was always a sound to it, inexpressible, a yellow sound, just a single chord struck and potent (not like cicadas and wildlife :) ) I wrote creative narratives for a bit, but while I can make plots and intricate characters, scenes, backgrounds....I can't make a story.

[Huh]

Thanks again btw!!!

[Ookpik]

Lol, not a problem : )

[John the Baptist]

Just remember, Prometheus, got on the wrong side of Zeus, who really resented having his fire stolen. A tough penalty, too, having his liver eaten by an eagle every day. If you do meet Pro, don't offer him a drink. He won't be able to handle it.

[Ookpik]

Suppose that's why Zeus left him his kidneys, eh John? Maybe it was his way of twisting the blade.read moreSuppose that's why Zeus left him his kidneys, eh John? Maybe it was his way of twisting the blade.

Good to see you and hope you're still well.

-Ook

[John the Baptist]

I think the great unspoken motto of the ancient Greeks was "Don't f**k with Zeus."

[Ookpik]

Hah! I think you're probably right about that John.

All the best to you and yours.