Desperation

Catching your attention

Is rough.

Rough as

Wind

That whips you

Back and forth.

And rain

When you prepare

For the harsh sting

It brings,

Upon you.

But I take

The sting well.

I'll hold

My outburst

Of desperation in.

For as long

As you

Hold yours.

 

 

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[V.B.]

"I'll hold My outburst Of desperation in. For as long As you Hold yours."

This is an awesome way to finish the poem--I absolutely love the sentiment. If I might make the suggestion to change "my outburst of desperation" to something like "I'll hold back my desperate outburst," though, I think it might work a bit better. Just my two cents, though--very much your poem, and do whatcha want with it. I'll like it either way!