knees creaking - a haiku

a haiku about early frost and aging

Author's Note

Publication Credit: "Haiga On-line" December 2012
Tied for First Place in Haiku this Haiga Contest
Link: http://www.haigaonline.com/issue13-2/issue.html
You can find my haiku under the Traditional Haiga section
of Haiga On-line - you will find there the original artwork for
which the haiku was written along with music composed to go
along with the haiga and Japanese translations of the haiku
(It is very beautiful when you see it all together.)

Graphic credit: Google Images - November Top Tips For Your Limousin Garden

Reviews

[Odysseus Wanders]

Interesting.. early frost and aging... synonymous in my line of work. and so many an early frost comes to those who do not care for their garden... I never knew much about Haiku, mysterious to me... but this works for me on many levels of interpretation... and it falls into an area of my deep knowledge, so i dont feel left out of it reading... i like this short impacting style... kinda makes you just deal with a subject matter very matter of fact... nice Joyce!

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Terry. The brevity of haiku and tanka leaves lots of "dreaming room" for the reader to co-write the poem with the poet. Much is left to the particular experience and imagination of the reader - the poet shows and should not tell the reader what to think. I appreciate your contributing your intimate knowledge of the subject. I appreciate your review very much.

[Poetic Beauty]

As we get older our bodies respond to cold weather much more harshly. I am not a lover of winter and can picture these words within my mind.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks, PB. Cold weather is the bane of my existence, and I start looking forward to spring in late fall. Living in the Northeast doesn't help the situation at all!

[Poetic Beauty]

Northeastern living in my opinion would suck in the winter

[Clara]

Fantastic poem, Joyce.

It made me think of snowflakes and how fragile they are - perhaps that's how we all become as we get a little older. There is also beauty and uniqueness in the process of aging. Wonderful!

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks, Lola, for your very nice review. Getting old is no fun but something all of us must deal with sooner or later, especially since the alternative is so much worse! lol

[MsJewel]

Absolutely perfect Joyce. Your words fit so well with the graphic. I'm going to look up Haiga On-line.

:) Julie

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks, Julie. I appreciate your very nice words and intention to look up Haiga on-line - I believe you are the only one to show that intent. It means a lot to me.

[MsJewel]

Joyce, What a cool website. Your poem is amazing. I love it with the original artwork - Congratulations on the win and thank you for the link. There is some really wonderful poetry posted. :) Julie

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you so much, Julie for your very nice remarks about Haiga on-line and my poem. Someday, if I ever retire, I'd like to take up photography and compose my own haiga. What a thrill that must be! :) Joyce

[Jeannear]

hey joyce! very pretty poem :)

[Baby Ricochet]

I can picture the whole thing. Good one Joyce.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks, BR. I really appreciate your very nice review.

[Sami Khalil]

A very powerful metaphor and comparison between knee kreeking , aging and the early frost of nature...Excellent...:)...........

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks, Sami. Your opinion means a lot to me.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)...........

[Lyn Anderson]

this is beautiful, and the font and photo fit perfectly.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, KL. Your very kind words mean a lot to me.

[Rita L. Sev]

Yes, frost and creaking joints do indeed spell the winter season... I like this tie-in of nature - our own and the atmosphere's. :)

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Rita, for your wonderful review.

[Pryde Foltz]

There is much meaning in this piece …. success.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Pryde. Your very kind review means a lot to me.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Lovely piece, Joyce you've merged the season and ageing splendidly in but a few words.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, PH. Your review is very gracious and much appreciated!